Performance Critique: March 10

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=klC8WjkrKDA

2m03s Try rephrasing “she’s cute and has five out of five stars”

2m46s Commit to this character more

3m33s Try saying “it’s like…” before “I wanna spend the rest of my life with you”

4m14s I’m trying to go vulnerable after being dark, but I need a better vulnerability joke

4m53s Consider doing an act out of offering plan B at the bar

5m14s It might make sense to add “I’m not making this up”

6m21s Do the batman character stronger

Overall: Decent for an open mic as most of the jokes got some sort of reaction. The twice the toys twice the neglect needs to be fixed up, I think it’s in the delivery.

Performance Critique: March 7

The Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7sga68V0n44

0m41s I need to figure out a way to deadpan without looking miserable

1m21s Hit “tap dancing” harder

2m38s Reword this to a lot less words

2m48s That’s a good save, “he should be able to fend for himself by twelve” – gotta remember that one

3m15s I didn’t need another tag after the ponytail

3m34s Take a longer pause between “took him to” and “the zoo”

4m26s Try changing this line to “what a pervert”

5m15s Keep my eyes focused in one place

Overall: I look miserable up there. I need to figure out a way to do “dark” material while still enjoying myself. The jokes themselves are okay, but can be tightened and reworded.

Improv Critique: March 2

This is the second class show for my latest improv class and I’m only gonna critique my parts. The format of this show was, walk around and dump three thoughts, do a monologue, repeat the previous two steps, then do two person scenes with the same person for two scenes, then do anything

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7WzCv7Na49k

0m54s Add details of the airline name, the company name and the hotel name

2m12s Look up more when speaking

3m22s I need to stop coming out on the first scene EVERY time

3m59s I could’ve focused more on his sneaking in plot and less on adding more information, move things forward

5m02s Should’ve focused on us as expert speakers to bankers on money laundering

7m29s Funny

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KOYhM6z4WIk

0m37s I should’ve talked to them instead of just giving them the sign, I should’ve talked about the laundry thing

1m03s Not terrible for being put on the spot

1m09s Should’ve cut back from ancient China to current day or some future time

3m35s I was confused where I was and came up with something

3m48s I’m not sure if I was supposed to be the same character as before, so I just went for it

4m16s After “stranger” I could’ve said “just call me Bob”

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R8JnfCQozTA

1m08s No idea what that was supposed to be about

3m35s I’m confused what’s going on, I should’ve given “dad” a reason to walk away instead of looking like a dear in head lights

3m58s Good job going with the avante garde dance thing

Overall: I was confused in a lot of scenes and didn’t commit fully to what was going on, and I questioned premises instead of assuming whatever the other person was doing was brilliant. Basically, I improv bombed: no strong “yes and’s”, no strong initiations and I didn’t commit to characters fully.

Improv Critique: February 21

I took another improv class and this is my first class show, I’m only gonna critique my parts. The format of this show was, walk around and dump three thoughts, do a monologue, repeat the previous two steps twice, then do two person scenes with the same person for three scenes

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9ynFGdSOQZ4

2m49s Be more specific and say what we should do, instead of “something”

3m19s Good line and good job keeping a straight face

3m49s We could’ve had more action taking place or at least started a bigger plan

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bsaf2ia1Cp0

1m16s I screwed up the last name of the other characters, good fix by my partner

2m32 Good job acknowledging the bad object work

4m54s I should’ve come in as the female masseuse

6m20s I still could’ve come in as the female masseuse

7m10s Good call back

7m28s I should’ve focused on why he kept making tacos, said that he owns the store or something

8m23s I could’ve said something like, “Now that I’ve made out with the sixth girl, I don’t need the “smart” title to get action anymore”

9m16s I should’ve remembered saying the lessons thing and gotten into a future scene with the Gambilini’s

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sjkFwz_4M_k

2m52s Both me and my scene partner are up on chairs filming, you can only see him

3m36s The show was supposed to end, but didn’t, so we came out for another scene and ended it on a laugh

Overall: Decent improv but I could’ve assisted in other scenes more and my scenes could’ve gotten to the funny quicker

Performance Critique: March 6b

Opening The Saturday Night Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Apbrc265qyw

1m48s Not sure why the jdate joke missed, I did it with the usual delivery

2m23s This is working better with a list of three

6m41s I love the audible gasps and the “jesus”

Overall: Great set overall and I went first. The only negative was the jdate joke missing. I lost the crowd a little at the last part of the suicide joke but it still made me laugh on the inside. I’m a huge fan of the “that KILLS at planned parenthood” tag.

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