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Performance Critique: March 7

The Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7sga68V0n44

0m41s I need to figure out a way to deadpan without looking miserable

1m21s Hit “tap dancing” harder

2m38s Reword this to a lot less words

2m48s That’s a good save, “he should be able to fend for himself by twelve” – gotta remember that one

3m15s I didn’t need another tag after the ponytail

3m34s Take a longer pause between “took him to” and “the zoo”

4m26s Try changing this line to “what a pervert”

5m15s Keep my eyes focused in one place

Overall: I look miserable up there. I need to figure out a way to do “dark” material while still enjoying myself. The jokes themselves are okay, but can be tightened and reworded.

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