The Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7sga68V0n44
0m41s I need to figure out a way to deadpan without looking miserable
1m21s Hit “tap dancing” harder
2m38s Reword this to a lot less words
2m48s That’s a good save, “he should be able to fend for himself by twelve” – gotta remember that one
3m15s I didn’t need another tag after the ponytail
3m34s Take a longer pause between “took him to” and “the zoo”
4m26s Try changing this line to “what a pervert”
5m15s Keep my eyes focused in one place
Overall: I look miserable up there. I need to figure out a way to do “dark” material while still enjoying myself. The jokes themselves are okay, but can be tightened and reworded.