Category: Comedy

A Saturday afternoon open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QN8OwRQCvQc

0m30s I’m playing with trying to start dark

1m39s Have the fingers on my hand more relaxed if they’re gonna be resting on my pants

3m18s Stop after “dry freeze bag”

4m24s This first one was supposed to be aol email versus gmail, then a music reference

5m22s That’s funny

5m50s Reword to “a photo at the morgue”

6m22s Have a bigger, more excited smile and act it out as an actual character

6m59s Don’t adjust my shirt right after a punch line, that’s distracting

Overall: The only big laugh was when I confused Sarah McLouclin with The Rolling Stones, so it was a rough set, even for an open mic. Also, looking at my notes ruins my flow and increases the odds that other comics will tune out. I have to try out brand new material somewhere but I should try to know what jokes I’ll be doing before hand so I don’t take such long pauses when looking at my notes.

The Friday Night Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F-jnTII00ZQ

2m18s That’s great

2m22s I should get his name then tell them to clap for him

2m40s I need a better way to get the “so my parents keep talking to me” line across

3m34s Not sure why that line didn’t hit, I delivered it well and paused long enough

4m48s Good call back on him being slow and making it part of another joke I do

5m18s Cut the word “for” out between “given you” and “adoption”

6m10s Good job doing three little jokes about my looks to three different groups of females

7m42s Try changing “three tonight?” to “this week?”

8m12s Smile more when doing this act out

8m33s Stay in the female voice for this last part

9m18s I love how admitting I’m about to cross the line gets a big laugh

Overall: Decent set but it’s weird the whole first part of my mom joke didn’t hit, as that tends to be one of the most consistent jokes. The yelp joke and shoes jokes are working pretty well, and will be even better once I make some more minor teaks.

An open mic with six or eight comics there

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bpNmL0cM2WE

0m15s Ad libbing from what the MC said

1m05s I’m purposefully trying to start with my dark stuff and see what happens

2m16s Don’t say the word “jokes”

4m26s Just say “tap dancing” no need to add “at NYU” cause “tap dancing” is the punch word

5m10s Move my eyes around, not my whole head for this character, that will communicate paranoia better

6m47s No need for the “oh my god” before “she is such a feminist,” maye a “wow”

7m24s Logically it should be “exactly one couple” instead of “one person”

8m07s Don’t put the emphasis on “unlike”

8m40s Maybe have my mom ask about the Aids at the start… this joke needs tightening and rewriting

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wiT1Xm9vsE0

1m08s Try changing it to “Hey Bill, yeah it’s really been two weeks, I know, I’m just here to pick up my check…”

Overall: It was a small crowd of comics and I got a laugh or three on most jokes, which is pretty good. The mesotheelioma joke needs to be rewritten and the tap dancing joke needs some minor tweaks.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=klC8WjkrKDA

2m03s Try rephrasing “she’s cute and has five out of five stars”

2m46s Commit to this character more

3m33s Try saying “it’s like…” before “I wanna spend the rest of my life with you”

4m14s I’m trying to go vulnerable after being dark, but I need a better vulnerability joke

4m53s Consider doing an act out of offering plan B at the bar

5m14s It might make sense to add “I’m not making this up”

6m21s Do the batman character stronger

Overall: Decent for an open mic as most of the jokes got some sort of reaction. The twice the toys twice the neglect needs to be fixed up, I think it’s in the delivery.

The Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7sga68V0n44

0m41s I need to figure out a way to deadpan without looking miserable

1m21s Hit “tap dancing” harder

2m38s Reword this to a lot less words

2m48s That’s a good save, “he should be able to fend for himself by twelve” – gotta remember that one

3m15s I didn’t need another tag after the ponytail

3m34s Take a longer pause between “took him to” and “the zoo”

4m26s Try changing this line to “what a pervert”

5m15s Keep my eyes focused in one place

Overall: I look miserable up there. I need to figure out a way to do “dark” material while still enjoying myself. The jokes themselves are okay, but can be tightened and reworded.