Tag: Critiques

Going last 2.5 hours into a show

httpv://youtu.be/nkTo4PU-K6k

0m06s No need to repeat “it does”

2m48s Need a better response when they dispute their cycle of sadness

3m05s Cut this line

3m27s Cut the whole phone charger joke when doing a tight set

3m58s Good to interact and go off script

5m07s Say “fail” instead of “end”

5m35s Change “he doesn’t have advanced degree” to “he has no future”

5m57s Say this sentence clearer

Overall: Ok response considering half of the already small crowd had left. Need to cut some stuff in the middle.

Doing the check spot on the 10pm show

httpv://youtu.be/Au7AGpzapb0

0m40s Need a better response for when someone names a “smart” school

3m55s If they say no to that question, I can say “someone’s a baller”

Overall: Good for checks. The talking stayed to a minimum and there were at least some laughs in most places and I didn’t have to address the checks being out

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/wHnG8qeRGc0

0m05s Say “thank you” directly into the mic after the applause dies down, instead of during

0m52s I need a better response for when they name a good school

2m19s Weird that “on the plane” got no laugh, try enunciating each word for delivery

6m11s Smile a little more while saying this

9m17s Find a stronger end to that joke

11m53s I could do a more colorful metaphor for “with all the enthusiasm”

12m15s Can cut out the relighting the candle part in a tight set

12m48s Good save at the end, but the end of the song should hit harder

Overall: Good set with consistent laughs but too many of the jokes ended weakly. Rework the endings or end each joke sooner.

A 10pm show with the camera 60 feet away picking up too much background noise

httpv://youtu.be/e8elZyWgyJw

0m42s More emphasis on “somebody”

3m51s Eyes need to be moving the whole time, don’t wait on the audience to laugh

5m45s Give her an extra half second to respond after “what are you up to later?”

7m52s The eyes should never stop moving

8m04s Scan the whole room, and maybe give a maniacal laugh, then get off stage, so that it’s more dramatic at the end

Overall: Mediocre. It was an up and down set that had some big laughs but way too many slow spots.

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/VeaugxO2KbA

0m08s Say thank you an extra time to increase the odds the guy in the back stops talking, or take a longer pause

0m28s Having someone “shhh” for me is better

4m48s Good idea doing crowd work after that bit, smoother than going straight into material

6m12s Consider cutting or reworking this whole part

7m45s Good job waiting for the crowd

8m55s The cross country flight needs punching up, it’s weaker than the first two parts of this joke

12m07s Try “started charging eighty” instead of “upped my price to eighty”

12m53s Have the hand puppets kiss at the end

16m09s Make the waiter sound even sadder

17m20s I like the ending, would be good to do two one liners instead of one before doing the reveal

Overall: Decent set. Minutes 12-17 had too much sad stuff in a row and I didn’t make enough use of the safe word concept. I also could’ve addressed the talking a little more.