An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Omu1C0iCxfQ
1m00s I should do roasts
3m49s Good job being in the moment and realizing what I did and then calling it out
4m45s Go back to the handjob motion for this, maybe wave before doing it first
Overall: Good job the first minute addressing the situation in the room and making fun of what happened earlier. Combining the yelp and Netflix jokes makes sense, but needs to be worded a little better.
Doing a regular spot at my show in Queens
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Iy6VVnw9PH4
0m26s Say “Hey girls” before that line
1m07s Hold the “what the fuck look” for longer
5m17s Remove word “your”
5m54s Drop down lower on the fake donkey
7m11s Do a stronger act out
7m51s Good job going along with the word stumble
8m10s Get rid of the Zeus inc tag
8m49s Good call back
9m33s Great crowd work, as usual good improvised crowd work gets bigger laughs than any material
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O1Og1wOF5Is
3m14s Sell the “what the hell” look harder
5m28s No need for “that’s bullshit”
Overall: Respectable set, the crowd work went over really well, I just gotta figure out how to do that consistently.
Late night with the few remaining audience members, after the regular show ended
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_ru-EfM9Zsc
2m37s Do more poses
3m04s Change “Fabio” to “Jesus”
3m48s Get rid of “your” in the sentence
4m03s Shorten “when did” to “when’d”
5m19s I need a stronger save if this joke doesn’t hit because it is a political joke
Overall: Except for the junkie actor joke I did well, especially considering it was 2.5 hours into the show
Headlining a bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5DPA-12h_40
0m43s Fix this tag, there’s potential but it’s not fully clear
2m22s Pause for another half second, they might eventually get it
3m09s “Elton” doesn’t work, go back to “Jesus”
3m51s Change “ask me” to “wonder”
4m22s End the response after “I love that Donkey”
4m43s Good line
5m00s Act out the guy
5m50s At least I cut this joke done from 2:30 to 1:00, but it’s still not working
9m25s This joke is clearer weaker than the other jokes
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=d_hrENo2to8
0m32s Be careful to say the same line of “nobody believes me” and not “no one believes me”
Overall: Lost part of the crowd in the middle when checks came out but I got them back towards the end.
Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NTtSCgyfFTw
0m43s Point first, then say the line
1m01s Not a great tag
2m52s Change heroin to alcohol or something more believable
Overall: Decent for working out new material
