Category: Performance Critiques

Going up on the 8pm show after someone bailed on their set two minutes in and made the room awkward.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4GYWiQ0oIko

1m17s Hold the “what the hell look” for an extra half second

1m52s The iPhone joke is no longer one of my stronger jokes

4m45s Scrunch my face first, then crouch down

4m56s Let them complain for longer before going into my rant

5m10s It doesn’t make sense to do both the “that’s how I wrote the joke” and to ask them for money

5m38s Shouldn’t have gone into another mom joke when the response to the first two was only so so

6m33s Don’t bring my arm up until the word “passion”

7m34s Lean back a bit while saying “no, no, no”

9m04s It should be “MY O’Reily Factor appearance” not “THE”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M41LUuI9ddQ

0m13s It should be “SWEAT pants” not “pants”

0m27s The above mistake is why this punchline completely missed

2m19s The better response would’ve been, “you’re my manager, I pay you to know if she’s here”

2m53s This is about when I should’ve grabbed the mic stand

Overall: I brought the room back to normal after it got really awkward but the set itself was average to mediocre.

Going last at my Astoria show for an audience of 8

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=04FwjJERZ_w

0m36s The wireless mic kept fading in and out

0m59s Pause after “How”

3m43s Say all these diseases much slower, pausing after each syllable, to prove my point

5m03s Tilt my head to the side and widen my eyes more

5m21s I can say “I don’t have a spreadsheet or something” as a callback to my “cool in a nerdy way” joke (that I didn’t do tonight)

6m39s Act more surprised about the last photo

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=putibvIr4GQ

1m01s I need a better punchline but the idea is there

1m57s Do that in the same voice as the previous impression

Overall: Considering I was sick and went up almost 2 hours into the show, it went okay. The callback ending worked well.

Going last on a show for ten people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_QFbu5VnhI4

0m13s Try not to say “fuck” this early in a set

0m59s Stay committed to the whole joke without commenting

2m10s Give examples of Maury, “You’re not the daddy, awww” “She left you, awww”, etc

2m29s Weird delivery on “some of them are cokeheads”, hit the line harder

3m27s Keep my hand at my face until I start saying the word “when”

3m58s That was fun for me

7m10s Good job looking at my watch for a while

Overall: Weak set but at least I finished stronger than I started, and I had fun with having everyone say “awww” to get it out of their system.

Going first on an 8pm show for 15 people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=58g1CUuor_Y

5m18s At least I got one good laugh

Overall: I got some laughs, but I feel this level of response is bombing for me at this point. I should’ve saved the “if you don’t laugh I’ll follow you home” line until at least after the “we’re not friends” joke. On the bright side, I at least ended stronger than I started and the Fox News joke hit hard.

The Sunday Writer’s Mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UkaA1JXHQS8

0m14s Sound more indignant about this

0m21s Make it more obvious that I’m talking to a waiter

1m34s No need to explain it

1m49s The sentence should be “we went to her place without getting food first”

2m49s It should be “that reads SIGNS”

4m22s This joke needs a better ending, but the premise has potential

Overall: I tried out four minutes of brand new, half written jokes, and three of them have potential (million point bonus, train conductor fine, and Israeli security questions). I need to rewrite them a few times and keep trying them.