Going last on a music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=geceBcttg4M
1m12s Turn my head to one direction or another on the “romantic” line
2m18s Cut the dog eating lines
4m22s Put the emphasis on “mine”
6m30s Add “I guess” before “I should’ve warned”
9m08s It should be “women’s” not “women”
Overall: It took a couple minutes to get the crowd with me, but then it went pretty well.
A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E_Tgn-0WoMo
3m22s Pick a word and go with it
4m33s Too much pause between the previous part of the joke and this, don’t bother with the second part if there’s a little crowd work between
Overall: Some laughs but a generally weak set.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oajJEvfoZnQ
1m26s Try “he can’t help you”
1m48s Instead of “that’s why I’m” say “good thing I’m”
3m07s If I’m gonna laugh it should be for longer and harder and then end more abruptly
4m43s There might be a better way to word this
Overall: Decent for a mic
Going last on a 10pm show for 8-10 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YCkCLDzugrc
0m35s I need a joke before the alibi joke to have something that I’m explaining
1m33s Good job fixing a blunder without breaking character
3m48s It should be “prefer” instead of “like”
4m41s I should mimic the audience’s laugh more often
5m18s Always nice if I can get laughs without talking for this long
7m38s Figure out a shorter term for “life insurance policy” maybe “too bad I knew how much she was leaving me in her will”
12m39s It should be “perfect” not “right”
Overall: Really solid set. I’m working on making the character more playful instead of just straight up psychopathic.
Going up 2.5+ hours into a show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e54wIJlFpeU
0m15s Always good to get laughs before I start talking
2m51s Tighten this sentence to “that psycho thing kinda turned me on”
4m20s If one save line that threatens the audience doesn’t work, a second one threatening the audience right after that won’t usually work
Overall: Another rough set. I started stronger than I ended, and the start wasn’t even that strong. I need to find the balance between insane and playful.
