The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0vdNIkqMx2U
2m30s Make the accent more consistent
5m10s Say the “fall in love” and “romantic” lines in my regular voice
8m52s Make an act out voice for the “call the cops” line
Overall: Average with some good moments but the momentum could’ve built better.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VAMdCV1j8XQ
1m51s Nice to get applause breaks at a mic
2m10s It should be “chiseling” not “carving”
2m52s Make it a statement, not a question
3m35s Cut or fully rework that last joke
4m39s Might make sense to change voices in the middle of this
Overall: The old joke went over really well, the new jokes need work
A late night music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MWDjKHUx4sg
2m18s I didn’t think/know/intend that as a punch line
4m42s This line isn’t needed after a good laugh
7m01s Say “inflation” a little more upbeat
8m36s Good job being in the moment
9m41s I can turn to an audience member like, “he’s like, is that true? Hmmm”
12m22s Don’t finish the joke or address the comment first
Overall: Decent not great.
“Headlining” a bar show for 4-6 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UKplehbIrRM
0m17s He said “this next comic gave me half my punchlines” which is why I addressed it
4m54s Say “need to” not “needa” and emphasis “need”
7m07s Be a little more smiley during this joke
7m52s Good save line, use it more often
12m38s Try the “that’s crazy right” in the crazy voice
13m58s Slightly longer pause after “I’m kidding”
15m05s Pause longer after “neuro war profiteering”
16m29s The gold line isn’t necessary, use a real save line instead
17m37s This can go to an act out
17m50s Change the voice for the friend a little more
Overall: Considering there were very few people here it went decently enough. This is the longest I’ve done with the split-personality act, so I was pleased I could do 21 minutes without notes
Going last on a comedy and music mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B_240SwGJ_A
0m48s Say “heard” not “saw”
1m12s No need to discuss my thoughts on it
5m43s Add in a “she’s like” before the whispering
6m21s Say the front runner line in the crazy voice
6m47s End the sentence on “was never a fan”
7m18s Do a stronger act out/different voice for the friend’s advice
8m36s I should use that line more often
8m59s Cut the metal rod line and go straight to the birthday
10m21s Instead of “I wouldn’t” just repeat “I wouldn’t date a sociopath”
Overall: Good set but some jokes could’ve gone better.
