I thought this up while sitting through a more painful than usual open mic. It’s meant as a joke, but can serve as a reminder for all of us to avoid the easy jokes.
In the past year I’ve definitely done 4 out of the 5 topics, and 2 out of the 5 bombing jokes (and probably other squares I’ve forgotten about), so I’m not claiming to be better than anyone…
An open mic with five comics in the audience
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WrBWRhdn_8I
0m58s Doesn’t make sense to do this if I haven’t done material yet
2m28s Tighten the wording here
2m40s Commit to the harness yank act out
3m17s Say this more seductively
4m18s No need for the word “personally” in that sentence
5m01s Cut the medusa head / web of hair lines
5m33s Keep cutting the material up to here
6m31s Get to this line much quicker
7m10s Stagger backwards first, then fall towards the floor
8m00s Reword this setup
8m16s Pause between “just enjoy the ride” and “the scream machine”
Overall: Worked out some new tags on some old jokes, and most of the new tags need to be cut.
A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DC0uO0HjVpQ
2m19s Interesting how that’s the biggest laugh of the joke
2m52s Say “you’re right” at the start of the sentence, not the end
8m00s Nice improvised line
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z17va6KYcq8
0m39s “This” meaning there only being six people there
1m53s Stay on the ground until the laughs stop
5m50s Cut the “airhole” line or revise it
6m55s Good job slowly selling the impression and then bailing
7m32s Decent idea of a boxing coach as a joke
Overall: It was good for what it was and I had fun.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l3L5hkpjmKw
2m13s This new save line is three for three
5m14s Don’t say “thanks” afterwards if I’m going to say “I’ll leave you guys on this” as the joke
Overall: Working out new and interconnected bits. New Years joke still needs work. And the dogs joke can be expanded.
The 8PM Show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wX_DSqkna9w
0m22s No need to address the intro when the front door stuff got a big laugh (although it was a creepy intro)
4m42s Rephrase this sentence to, “I love meeting new people after shows, especially when they buy my DVDs”
5m30s I can cut words by just saying, “I’d at least check for an adams apple first”
8m32s This joke lost them two straight nights, I’m not yet sure where it goes wrong
9m15s This should get a stronger response. It’s probably because I didn’t acknowledge it getting weird in the room after the million point bonus joke.
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=egr-_ZRPgUA
Overall: Mediocre. I had solid but weak laughs for the first eight and half minutes, then lost them on a joke and didn’t acknowledge it and didn’t fully get the crowd back for the rest of the set because of that.
