Tag: Critiques

Going up last 2.5 hours into a show

httpv://youtu.be/UZ-kndgFbp0

0m08s Don’t start out with putting that thought in their head

0m49s Need a better line for if they disagree with me

1m29s Sell the woah harder

2m57s Sell the “just cause”

3m02s Avoid the getting smart comments

4m12s Say “turned into” instead of just “is”

4m21s If the Russian stuff missed that bad, I probably shouldn’t have gone into more of it

5m20s Try to stay in tune for the end of it

5m29s It got a laugh no need to say “it went nowhere”

Overall: Started out okay enough but got weird and low response for the two Russian bits at the end.

Towards the end of an 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/AromsSvtA50

1m30s Move eyes side to side slower

5m03s Instead of “this vicious cycle” say “MY vicious cycle”

5m20s Remember to the put mic stand back in to do a better hula hoop

6m42s Fifth and sixth year should be on the same hand

6m58s No need to point this out when I get a good laugh

8m28s Learn to pause after “sometimes” if a big laugh comes

8m38s Don’t stutter on the line

9m20s Nice improvised line

Overall: Good set.

The Sunday Writer’s Mic

httpv://youtu.be/OSyXjpyW7x4

3m04s Fix or reword the multiple carriers part

3m39s Don’t pause between kiss and on the mouth

3m50s Or just cut this whole part

Overall: Decent for a mic but the lines I’ve changed still need work

Going first on a 4:30pm show

httpv://youtu.be/pbtN1Ka47k4

0m28s Don’t say “good start”

1m28s Make “maybe” sound more threatening

2m04s Slow down the plane line

2m39s Call out the “ooh” as that line doesn’t deserve it

4m15s Should’ve done a save line before going into a new bit

Overall: Started out ok-ish then got weaker. Go to save lines sooner and don’t hold back from doing actual crowd work even if it’s a short set.

Going first on a 2pm show

httpv://youtu.be/4HrBXDi0dNk

4m21s Don’t switch hands on the mic for the two characters, it takes too long

5m26s Keep the mic distance the same

6m23s That’s the weakest the birthday song has closed in a while

Overall: Solid but not great, and the Birthday bit at the end wasn’t as strong as it usually is.