Tag: Critiques

This is the same place I usually bark at. This was a crowd of 6 people: 4 girls who were great and laughing at almost everything and a couple in their 50’s or 60’s. The wife was laughing but the husband was tough. Of course, being mental like most comics are, I was more concerned about getting the one guy to laugh than I enjoyed everyone else laughing.

0m20s I didn’t smile enough before opening my mouth. 

0m46s My tone isn’t as soft as it was in my last performance critique. It sounds like I’m speaking at the audience instead of to the audience. 

1m07s I guess I’m not the only one that loves attention. 

2m21s They crowd was laughing, so I started laughing. You can’t hear the laughter but I swear it happened. 

2m47s A good example of the benefits of calling out the moment especially when you mess up a joke. 

4m22s I’ve done this third punch line with and without throwing in the “I’m looking at you” bit, and it gets a much better response with it. 

4m38s All that background noise is when the door to the waiting room opens. I’ve gotten much better at waiting for it to close before I deliver a punch line, but I still hate how it messes up my timing. 

5m06s That was the only laugh I got from the guy the whole set, but I got a laugh. 

5m33s My facial expression has a smile, it should be more shocked. 

Overall: Decent set, the group of four girls was laughing at most of the bits. I still stumble over words at times, and I haven’t quite figured out why that happens or how I can ensure it doesn’t happen.

This is the place where I bark at. There was a crowd of 12-14 people, and I wound up convincing a group of 8 people from Philly to come to the show.

0m05s I love when a host butchers my last name. Almost as much as other comics must love it when I host and butcher their last name. 

0m19s Anytime you can have the crowd dying before you say anything, you should have a pretty good set. If you don’t, your material managed to lose the crowd. 

0m59s My delivery is more laid back than usual, I have no idea why or how this happened, but I like it. 

1m19s This is a strong way to control the crowd, I’m similar to a talk show host by directing who can speak first. 

1m29s She said “I have a cat”. I should’ve pointed out how she just wanted attention. 

1m45s I think I went a little over board by saying “there’s a decent human being in here” this can turn a crowd against you, but luckily it didn’t this time. 

2m48s I think I need a different deliver about the “neglecting kids” as people find it funny but don’t want to laugh. My delivery needs to make it okay to laugh. I’m not sure what it should sound like though. 

3m09s It seems on the rare occasions that I laugh during my set, everyone laughs. I need to identify parts where I can laugh. 

3m40s The person I addressed was a middle aged woman, which is why I felt the need to comment on the look she gave me. 

3m52s Being aware of what’s going on in the room (the parts you can see anyway) can really add to the jokes. 

4m18s It took me 3 seconds of silence to force the laugh, and another 3 seconds for them to stop laughing. Some comics have commented that it screws up my delivery, the whole waiting for the audience to laugh thing but until I can get instant laughs, I’m okay with forcing it out every once in a while. 

4m39s That was the worst act out I’ve ever done. Before I got on stage, I envisioned miming the process of shit hitting the ceiling fan, but the way I just did it makes it look like I had a quick seizure. 

4m43s I originally had planned to keep ducking out of the way of shit after each of the 3 examples, but for some reason I only flinched about marriage. 

4m54s I should say “bomb on your face” instead of “booby trap on your face” 

5m18s The babysitting kids and why psychos are better than kids lines need to be tightened. 

5m25s I shouldn’t say third date twice. The first line should be “If you get past all that, the next time you meet you’re having sex” 

6m24s The terrible act outs continue. That was supposed to be me slamming a door in the face of a Jehovah’s Witness. I should’ve probably opened the door first, and held onto the door knob a bit more convincingly. 

Overall: Delivery wise, this was one of my best sets. I was relaxed, at east, didn’t rush and interacted with the audience. It’s one of my most conversational performances.

This is the place where I bark, there was about 12 people, 6 of them were one of the comic’s English as a second language students. 

0m48s The bit about robbery might have to be cut, or I should just save it if I ever get to perform at The Apollo. 

2m17s Good job finally keeping my hand cupped and open for a few seconds after the joke. 

3m19s Either I sucked tonight or the crowd was really dead. Usually I’d blame myself, but my pacing was good and I don’t recall any other comics I watched getting big laughs. 

4m28s I took an extra long pause before my punchline because the door opened and it was noisy outside, you can hear it on the tape. 

4m56s This crowd wasn’t laughing or listening or I was really bad. It felt like I was practicing my stand up at home. 

Overall: I didn’t realize how few laughs I got until watching the video. Now that I think about it, I do remember the emcee doing material after my set, which is always a sign that you really sucked. So I bombed without realizing it. Reminds me of the whole when a tree falls in the woods and nobody is there to hear it… except I was the tree and the ears in this case. I guess the overall takeaway is never to trust your reaction when you come off of the stage.