The Sunday Writer’s Mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=652NYhqMwOQ
0m32s Don’t stumble
0m42s These analogies aren’t working
0m51s Go harder with “remix”
1m26s Set this up more, half a sentence isn’t enough, maybe personalize it
2m37s The pacing is off
3m32s Gotta end it on the fast “blurry blurry blark” stuff
Overall: The sand joke needs some work and some tightening but it will be really good in two months. The Netflix joke also needs some tightening, but the first part of it is pretty solid.
