Category: Performance Critiques

This is me back in NYC for a crowd of around ten people.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qnM9kgVUF-E

0m34s This is the quickest I’ve gone into the fallopian tubes joke, I’m still debating whether the audience needs to be accustomed to me for a few more seconds before going to this joke

1m50s Weird place for me to take a pause

2m05s Since the crowd interrupted with approval I didn’t need to say “too” after “I was creeped out”

2m14s I pointed to myself at the wrong time, I should point when I say “for Jewish people”

3m07s I like my reaction to someone “awwwing”

3m43s This crowd is a little slower then usual

3m55s First time all three punch lines worked in a row

4m15s I need to change my tone for “I don’t mean to give the game away”

4m24s I forgot “all night long”

5m05s I need to look up when I say that

5m22s Now that’s a good MC

Overall: The jdate joke did well, and it looks like I did better on the video than I actually felt when I did. (Hence my ending the set with “they’re gonna go molest me now”).

This is back in DC, I hosted a show with 10 audience members.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sEQvGHcaXkg

2m30s Not sure why I went with a depressing story without a punch line… practicing improv and free association I guess 

3m03s Random line for someone to yell out on 

3m59s My hand motions should start from the top and go lower like shoulder, chest, waist. I went waist, chest, waist. It’s harder to follow 

4m41s There was a group of six with three kids under the age of five all the way in the back. They started nursing an infant in the middle of someone else’s set. 

5m24s I shrugged my shoulders three seconds too soon 

6m10s The yearbook line isn’t working, need to drop it 

6m33s Try reversing the order: “I get it, you’ll never dress up for me. And you’re boring in bed” 

8m18s Stop saying “bam!” 

8m29s This was new, I’m glad it worked 

9m15s Build up the tension with a longer pause and shift locations before saying “Really? Me too!” 

9m37s Need a more surprising word than “cardboard box” 

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EsIttbfjnZo 

0m24s I tried a different type of positioning for acting out the two characters because it didn’t look good when I was turned away from the audience. I don’t think I like the left side / right side act out either… 

0m44s Stronger “huge tubes” 

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JD17lBnpAxU

This is me doing time between comics 

0m28s This sentence sounds awkward… I need to get to “nascar driver” quicker 

Part 4 

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-oATHdsEQ04

This me doing time between another comic. 

0m48s Say “promptly” a lot quicker and maybe a finger snap 

Overall: I did a decent job hosting and was able to do twelve minutes up front without looking at my notes. The new online dating face painting joke is working really well, and the new facebook line worked out pretty good too.

Back in DC, I think there were five audience members, three of whom proceeded to argue over their check while I was on stage. As I told one of my comedy friends, this is the kind of night were you might contemplate suicide afterwards.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HMAtPdH8j9s 

0m17s One comic brought three of his friends and his three friends proceeded not to watch any of the comedians, even their buddy. They’d just stare off into space. So I had to try to talk to them. 

0m51s I really wanted to know how they knew each other but they wouldn’t give me any straight answers 

1m21s I love when a new comedian doesn’t know to not talk during someone else’s set 

2m01s I really said that before the set because nobody was paying attention 

2m22s Doug is another comic 

2m38s It was really distracting for them to argue and it’s $1.95 yuengling night 

3m02s I love rewinding time 

3m11s It’s even better when nobody minds that I do it 

3m40s This was the only punch line I wanted to really test out tonight and it worked 

4m47s Maybe the punch line should be “I get it, that’s the only time of year you’ll dress up for me” 

5m35s If I say “bam!” one more time, I’m gonna punch myself in the face 

5m46s The fall in love with me line got a response, not much of one, but for this set anything is pretty positive 

Overall: The pain of this set was worth it because “I learned to face paint” got a good laugh

This is the feedback mic I go to on Sundays.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9-ynWOS6bpo 

0m36s One of the comics in this room is a clown 

0m53s I love this new punch line about face painting, it can still be tightened though 

1m52s Terrible pacing on the punch line 

1m58s I love rewinding time 

2m04s The Halloween part of the facebook joke still needs to be fixed 

2m15s There was a random group of five people that walked in that didn’t speak English 

2m51s Stop saying “bam” and just do the finger snap 

2m59s Throw in a “you’d be surprised how often that happens” 

4m01s I like the nascar driver part but it needs to be worded better 

4m11s True story, and I actually told them that “woah, I won’t cheat… with just one of you” 

Overall: There were four new punch lines that I was trying out and only one of them worked (face painting). The other ones have promise (facebook Halloween, take her to a comedy club for the second date and nascar driver) but need to be worded better

The 10:30 show was canceled, so this is the 1am prom show. 

There were twenty five kids from the same limo and a group of four college girls who happened to wind up at this prom show. I’ve never witnessed a show like this before: six of the eight comics were unable to do any material because the kids were so ADD and disruptive that each set would devolve into a conversation with no punch lines within thirty seconds of opening. Even the “pro” comics who didn’t have to bark for stage time couldn’t get through their sets.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H5-mMrdePcw 

0m12s Look at all the talking before I even start talking 

0m38s Having witnessed everyone else’s downfall before me, I decided to ignore all audience comments and just do my jokes 

1m02s I’m talking faster than usual to try to get the crowd to shut up 

1m29s Ignoring them worked for twenty seven seconds 

1m37s I didn’t ask if anyone had dogs because I knew I’d never get the set back 

1m49s This wound up getting less laughs because it wasn’t set up in the normal way 

2m57s Notice the one girl responding to EVERYTHING 

3m09s You can only ignore so much 

3m27s It’s bad when your friends have to tell you to shut up 

3m57s Sarcasm included free of charge 

5m56s Look at the shot glass when saying what it said 

Overall: Considering how everyone else’s set on the show got derailed like John Daly at a liquor store, I’m really proud of my set. I won’t be submitting this tape to any comedy festivals, but this set and the April 15th set  where the host was getting into a fight with audience members while I was on stage, are my two best instances of concentration.