Category: Performance Critiques

This is the 1030 show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o0impEAj7b8

1m01s If they don’t laugh at the “that takes tits” then it’s gonna be an uphill set

1m26s From the lack of laughs, I just remembered that this was a check spot

1m50s No need for “girl who used to be in the circus”, make it just “girl from the circus”

3m15s At least I called out the situation

4m15s That was funny to me cause it’s true

4m45s He responded “I’m her brother”

4m58s I’m talking too fast

Overall: This was a check spot, and people weren’t really paying attention because they were figuring out their bill. I’m still trying to figure out how to do a check spot well. The funniest part of the set was when I told a girl I’d hit on her after the show and it turned out she was with her brother, I told him I was a good guy then proceeded to tell a bad guy joke.

NYC show, 8-10 person crowd

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z0SDKmnKHmw

0m55s I’m not fed up enough about “no situation ever warrants…”

1m09s Not enough emotion in the delivery

1m25s I missed saying “if you do that” before “then you got huge tubes”

1m54s No transition

2m24s It’s funny, even if they didn’t fully get it

3m47s It’s never a great set if I have to use three different “if someone doesn’t laugh” jokes

Overall: I sounded a bit robotic and didn’t connect with the crowd. They were giggling through most of it, but not laughing hard…

This is my third show of the night with a slightly larger crowd

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2CTKG8b9uFw

1m40s So this is what an audience of more than 8 people sounds like, I almost forgot what laughter is…

2m23s I should change “they beat me” to “they whip me – that was ten lashes”

2m44s Change “who’s in the circus” to “from the circus”

3m03s I gotta remember to wait longer on that punch line as its not obvious

3m34s Laughing at my jokes seems to be effective

4m18s Halloween outfit needs to go

4m24s I really need to stop interrupting my flow of a multi-punch line joke with the acknowledgement that one of the laughs didn’t work

Overall: This was much better than my previous set, although the delivery and jokes weren’t that different. It turns out that the larger a crowd is, the more likely someone is to laugh. Shocking, I know, but lately I’ve been doing too many shows that have 4 to 10 people in the crowd. It was nice to see that I can still get some laughs. However, I wasn’t conversational enough here, or else I would’ve done much better.

Same night, next show, still a small crowd

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bFqXZjFgslw

0m29s I love how it’s loud every time the door opens

0m48s I really didn’t mean it sarcastically, but I guess comics hadn’t done well with this crowd before me

2m02s I love when the door opens on a punch line

2m15s Don’t blink after “it costs money” just stare into the crowd for five seconds

2m35s I love when the crowd punches up my jokes

3m54s I need to pause longer to let the line sink in before I nod my head and smile

Overall: This is pretty close to completely bombing. In some sets I’ve been able to pinpoint where I lose the crowd, but here it seems like I never really had them. Maybe I shouldn’t start with “thank you for the shittiest applause ever” but I thought that was funny.

Back in NYC in front of a smallish crowd.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fkyu401MaVc

0m9s I’m 95% sure my statement is true. I wasn’t scheduled to go up, but the comic who was left the room and they needed to put someone up. The host asked me if I was ready and I replied “always.”

1m00s I should’ve said “fallopian tubes” stronger

1m27s I could use a little more emphasis on “just five words” to show how impressive that is

2m37s I love how I’m the only one cracking up at my punch line

3m22s Great job thinking out loud (sarcasm) – I shouldn’t think out loud unless it’s funny

4m19s I say “day” and “today” in the same sentence, need to figure out a way to change it up.

4m57s My favorite line of the set… I should reuse this for future sets, after asking someone “Have you ever had to hold someone all night long?” I can say “she just gave you the look of death”

Overall: It’s never a great set when your best laugh occurs when you tell the audience the comic that was scheduled is in the bathroom. I do think I found a new line that I didn’t realize until re-watching this tape. It’s also a bad idea to think out loud about which joke I want to tell next and why.