Category: Performance Critiques

Sunday writer’s mic, I’m hosting

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Rp-5Xg7br-4

0m06s I haven’t done this joke in ages, tried bringing it back

0m24s Change “hookups” to “partners”

0m48s Get rid of the cosmos part

1m05s Scroll faster when saying “167 reviews” then scroll slowly when talking about “3 tonight”

2m09s Instead of “and how many numbers they get” it should be “and how many women they sleep with”

2m29s It should be “black, white and pink” not “red, white and pink”

2m50s The delivery is all off, but I’m not sure what the right delivery is

Overall: I only did three jokes, and two of them I’ve been working out for a while. I should try the unemployment joke at a real show.

A Saturday Night Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=inkodSFUAHc

0m14s That was an improvised opener

0m38s I echoed what the audience member said and then kept going because I didn’t want to get derailed, but didn’t want to ignore them either

1m03s Get rid of the words “it’s like”

2m40s Don’t smile here

2m57s I could’ve paused an extra half second and I think a second rounds of laughs would’ve started

6m25s Pause after “options on the menu”

6m34s It should be “eat the salmon” instead of “order the salmon”

6m49s Get rid of the cosmos part

6m56s I got the words mixed up, “nearby location search”

7m11s Turn all the way to the crowd and look more horrified

8m10s Great response to a random comment

8m20s I felt I went a little far with the “maybe your girl” so then I had to take it two steps further to get away with it

9m08s Try doing some sort of “facepainting sex” motion

9m39s Pause for an extra second after perfect so they clap more

Overall: Very solid set but I need to work on not smiling so much and get the yelp joke even better.

Friday Night Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vbIMqG_ZTOE

0m18s I left the MC’s joke on here on purpose because I played off it

0m47s Instead of “he just” say “I just”

3m04s I should’ve also added “that was cute” as it was a couple of dudes

4m00s Don’t look down when changing characters

5m55s Go into the wife’s laugh more and either ask or talk about it, I need to work on making comments in groups of three instead of one off remarks

7m15s Change the wording to “could’ve spiced things up”

7m52s Look up at the audience higher

8m48s I need to add “Let’s just say that” before “Igor liked last year”

9m16s The shoes joke isn’t clear yet

Overall: This was an okay set, but not great. Laughs were consistent but not huge and I didn’t follow through on my crowd comments as much as I should. I really need to get in the habit of when I remark on something going on, to make three remarks on it instead of just one.

This is an open mic with 6 comics and one girlfriend in attendance

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qPL9jLTExsE

0m18s I’m trying to get the one real person (comic’s girlfriend) to stay for the whole set

1m12s Give a bigger “what the hell” look on “Igor likes this”

3m01s I should look at the audience when I do the mom voice, not up in the sky

3m57s Stumbling over the words a bit, this is what happens when I don’t have a newer joke down cold

4m30s Be more excited and look up at the audience more often for this

4m39s Be louder and in more shock when saying this

7m28s Waitress dropped checks, so I addressed it

9m39s I love that I did an inside joke and it didn’t get a laugh

Overall: Not a lot of laughs, but that was expected. I’m happy that I didn’t speed up my delivery when I wasn’t getting big laughs. Also, the Yelp joke still needs work.

Another weeknight show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OxQJM0IYgvM

0m50s Look more horrified, open my mouth more, and scan my eyes more after “Igor likes this”

1m27s No need to call out the hating Igor when the rest of the joke went fine

1m40s Good long awkward pause

3m05s I should have my hands specifically different for when I’m doing my mom’s voice and when I’m doing mine to make the difference even clearer

3m32s I should pause after “There were a lot of options on the menu” because that’s a punch line

3m48s An example of why it’s important to pay attention to the audience, calling them out (in a fun, positive way) keeps them paying attention

4m56s Don’t stumble over the premise, be clearer

5m59s Don’t smile at this part

Overall: This was a decent set. The longer than needed pauses really worked well. The Yelp joke still needs some work but is getting there. The shoes joke needs to be a lot clearer at the start, if you have an idea for how to setup the shoes joke, please post in the comments as I still haven’t figured it out.