Category: Performance Critiques

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o3ubQzozd2s

0m43s I tried making the “announce it on Facebook” a list, I don’t think it works, or I need to get a better first and second items in the list

1m01s Replace “Ivan knew it”

1m07s No need to acknowledge the names

1m57s Pause longer after “alone”

2m11s This whole bit is going too fast and without pauses

3m21s Do “escape soviet Russia” before “climb Berlin wall”

3m43s Remove either “for twelve weeks” or “in freezing rain” to keep the pace and flow consistent

Overall: I did two old jokes but have changed some of the wording and added more tags. The “women Ben is no longer fucking” tag is a keeper, the other tags in the Facebook joke need work. I also need to work on slowing down even if I know I’m only doing 3 or 4 minutes.

St Patrick’s Day is not a big day for comedy, a six person crowd and I’m opening

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vv6EjcEUb3w

1m05s I just rewrote the joke earlier in the day and didn’t get a chance to memorize the new punch lines

2m41s It should be “climb Berlin wall”

3m18s Change “luggage” to “baggage claim”

Overall: I’ve reworked my older jokes and need to spend some time memorizing them and cleaning it up.

The music, comedy and magic open mic in Queens, about 8 people in here

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1TRCjI8Yah0

0m18s The performer before me had a song “the most unavailable man in the world”

1m31s At bar shows, I try not to call out every time it gets louder, cause it just distracts more people

2m27s This guy looks ridiculous, white beard and all, but he can play a mean banjo

4m50s Put a joke there

7m24s If doing a bar show, try to change “McCoy’s” to the name of the pub I’m in

8m01s Good job redoing the joke for the other girl

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YgHFoxvrhuA

0m41s I need to add “under any circumstances”

2m46s Pause after “comedies” for another half second

3m12s Be funnier about this, “don’t leave her alone, I’ll get her pregnant by the time you’re done peeing”

3m46s I gotta react to “I’ll see you after the show”

4m26s Rephrase it “I wanna make sure the “photo” has you and the whale”

5m15s I love that the guy is telling me about how a porn site works while his girl is sitting right there

5m32s Good reaction to her “no”

7m57s This is a good place to throw in “I’m following you home regardless”

Overall: I had decent crowd interaction with the three people who were actually listening. I still need to commit to my characters more. It’s always nice to be able to do 18 minute sets, even if it’s at midnight in a bar in queens.

A Monday restaurant room show, small crowd

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yBzu_SZLCaM

0m14s Obviously, this wasn’t how I asked to be introduced

0m32s I had to address her intro, but I didn’t have anything witty

1m50s I need to do a stronger “what the fuck look” for Igor likes this

3m42s No need for my mom asking a question

6m31s Change the order back to how it was, shoes then prostitutes

6m48s Smile bigger on the female

Overall: I need to work on committing to my characters and act outs more.

The Sunday Night Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pL6B5RJ9MLE

0m10s The comic before me was getting girls numbers after his set

0m36s I should’ve just ejected from the joke the second time

2m00s Not sure why they’re laughing that much at the setup

2m24s I should have started just talking to them and doing crowd work here, they’re not fully paying attention

4m15s The audience isn’t with me at all, I decided to plow instead of address it

4m58s No idea why I decided to keep doing mom material when the first part of it didn’t hit

7m17s Throw in “that’s like…” before “I wanna spend the rest of my life with you”

7m29s At least I ended on a laugh

Overall: I ate it. I bombed. It was pretty painfully bad. I’m not sure where I lost them, but I remember I realized I lost them, and instead of doing crowd work and addressing it, I just tried to plow through with material. That was the wrong decision. Next time I realize nothing is clicking, I’ll address it or just do a little crowd work.