Category: Performance Critiques

Saturday afternoon mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gaQCFZ7xFUM

0m16s The MC was doing an impression of “bad MCing” so I wanted to add that in, that failed

0m44s Don’t say subtle twice

1m04s Keep the handshaking going for all three characters without stopping

1m15s Put in the word “future” before children

1m37s No need for “dollar” in there

2m36s No need for the word “can” just “If you convince…”

2m48s Instead of “means” I should say “takes”

3m31s Get rid of the organic brownie part

4m39s I screwed up the start of it by actually saying his name

5m01s I didn’t explain the technique well enough before doing it

Overall: I need to say newer jokes out loud at least three times before doing them at mics, or else too many words get flubbed.

Opening the Friday night show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gSdl9uBjfTI

0m36s Not sure if the whispering works

2m04s Change “family” to “mom”

2m23s I’m a little too bent over

2m58s Weird that they didn’t laugh at “I remember being on the plane”

3m38s I messed up the line because I was already thinking about the next joke

5m05s Do a more husky voice for the man

5m30s I flubbed the line, it should be “but no situation ever warrants someone saying…”

7m15s Pause after “eye fucking”

Overall: Very mediocre. I was trying some new jokes and cut the length of existing jokes, so I was thinking about that more than being in the moment. I need to practice more before doing a new order in a short set, so that I don’t think about it during.

MCing a bar show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OROJIxa4BJA

0m31s When a room is really weird looking and you’re up first, you gotta acknowledge it

4m37s This joke is really hit or miss

5m25s I need to change from a female voice to a male voice for part of this joke

5m37s They were Asian

7m27s I forgot to mention he gets paranoid, and that’s an important part of the premise

8m44s Say “them” not “em

Part 2: Doing a little time between comics

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SKtJK3FjK7M

2m10s I should give this explanation at the start of the show

2m35s And I stopped doing material after this

Overall: My hosting up front was better than the material in between comics. I could’ve done my crowd work and actually talking to the audience, but then again, there were about 4 real audience members here…

Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YUagRxpy_VI

0m15s I could have just left it at socks

1m26s I need to add in “I’m making an exception for you”

2m58s I need to say “he’ll be like” before going into it

3m18s Don’t move my head, only my eyes for this character

Overall: I worked out some stuff. I need to mix in dark jokes with normal jokes, or it gets too predictable.

The Saturday night show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JCwZIo0ZOs8

2m00s Doing the face and arm motion in the middle there is awkward

3m09s “Hire a hit man” doesn’t work, change the line back to “put a hit on my life”

4m48s The hair gel line isn’t that strong

Overall: Very solid set throughout. (In general, the better the set, the less comments I tend to have.) I got big laughs on most lines and medium laughs on most of the rest. The “hire a hit man” and “power of hair gel” lines need rework though.