Category: Performance Critiques

The Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qUdMhTnjvs4

0m54s Add “gets” after “Benflix”

1m20s Yell out “remix”

1m30s Point at someone when I say “you know it”

1m44s Reword to “my rap album drops next month”

2m04s End the sentence with “reviews for sexual partners”

3m14s I forgot to do the second part of the joke with girls being like restaurants

4m06s Have more emphasis on “existence”

Overall: Working out my half polished material, it’s passable but could still use a little tweaking.

A midnight show, that didn’t actually start till 12:30 and I’m the last one up

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=osTw_w9ql6c

1m22s No need to say “cancel relationship” twice

2m22s Don’t back down from the “eye fucking” so quickly

3m45s I need to think of another Russian weapon that’s better known

4m40s When “being on the plane” misses, I know to get out of the mom jokes

5m50s Explain the iphone app better

6m59s The dark joke missing makes getting followed home even funnier

7m48s Yell out “remix” louder

Overall: I had steady laughs except for the Yale joke which missed. At two am, keeping everyone focused is a feat in itself. This was also the first time I did the netflix joke with a live audience, and it went over fairly well.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tAgNc8-pITE

1m44s The new version of “cancel relationship” isn’t as good as the old version

2m14s This is a good one liner before the suicide joke

3m36s I missed the hard “v” on “what”

4m02s My accent has been better

6m22s I shouldn’t do these one liners unless the j-date joke kills

Overall: This was pretty strong set throughout, but I need to end on a stronger joke than my dating one liners. Also, I should go back to my original version of the “cancel relationship” joke.

A 6pm show, with four audience members

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xHz0-ACq1GQ

1m30s Pause a little longer after the fist pump

3m35s I should’ve gone into the brother-sister dynamic more

4m33s Say this more “matter of fact” and less angry

5m21s No need for the word “no”

5m56s Instead of “before going back with her” say “before we get down to it”

Overall: My delivery was good and smooth, and I got consistently small laughs from the tiny audience. I could’ve addressed what the audience member said better, but otherwise it was fine.

Opening the Friday night show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Fe6vWZdPHFM

1m22s Slow down

3m05s I don’t sound conversational

4m56s I need to say this as more matter of fact

6m03s Throw my arm out “tap dancing”

6m32s This is a new line and relatively strong

7m26s At least I ended strong

Overall: I talked too fast and didn’t sound conversational at all for the first five minutes. I need to learn the sweet spot between not smiling and not yelling at the audience.