Category: Performance Critiques

A Monday bar show, with sparse audience

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p_N–qXavUk

1m53s They’re not fully listening by this point, I should talk to them a little bit

7m27s If I’m gonna ask about it, then I need to make a Catholic joke right after that

8m34s More emphasis on “without”

9m22s No need to explain the Wikipedia part, especially after a laugh

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XtMGN6WRjTs

0m28s Say “and here’s a picture of me taking a picture of…”

1m36s Pick which word to emphasize more consistently

2m00s Don’t do the fast stuff in the middle of the joke, only do it at the end

2m38s End this stronger

3m18s I should’ve noticed the crowd liked the dirtier jokes earlier in the set

4m01s Go back to “this week” instead of “since Tuesday”

Overall: I did some old stuff and some new stuff, it wasn’t great, but it wasn’t terrible either, especially given the crowd size. The sand joke needs some work.

The Sunday Writer’s Mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=652NYhqMwOQ

0m32s Don’t stumble

0m42s These analogies aren’t working

0m51s Go harder with “remix”

1m26s Set this up more, half a sentence isn’t enough, maybe personalize it

2m37s The pacing is off

3m32s Gotta end it on the fast “blurry blurry blark” stuff

Overall: The sand joke needs some work and some tightening but it will be really good in two months. The Netflix joke also needs some tightening, but the first part of it is pretty solid.

Saturday night show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uFIbhknSwL0

0m44s Shrug my shoulders before saying the line

3m58s Get angrier in the mom act out

Overall: Solid set with good laughs throughout.

Saturday open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cF0gqefuNT0

0m33s Cut this joke

1m22s Act out each picture being shown with some motion

1m37s Slow down, a lot

3m33s The first part of the Netflix joke is good, then it’s useless until the “scratched” line

Overall: I need to slow down on the vacation photos joke and the Netflix joke will be good if I get rid of the middle part.

A Friday Night Benefit Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HwCrQq6uA-0

1m01s Make a bigger arm motion and bigger facial expression

2m47s That’s one of the funniest responses I’ve ever heard from an audience member

4m23s The mom act out should’ve been angrier

5m11s Good job waiting for them to laugh after “Jehovah’s witnesses”

5m52s Cut the “pamphlet” line

6m36s I should learn to not do the rest of this joke if “perfect” doesn’t get a big laugh

7m05s Bad save line in this situation

7m11s Luckily the Carrot Top line saved the set from ending terribly

Overall: I had a great first 6 minutes and a terrible last minute. The big thing I learned is, if you’re doing a benefit show for some medical charity, avoid suicide and abortion jokes. (Yes, this is obvious in retrospect.)