Category: Performance Critiques

Opening at the 6:30 Show for 12-15 people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7I42K5eNOxc

2m59s I’m not a huge fan of this joke, but it tends to win back a crowd

5m08s Good job calling out a situation

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-ZHlAscdPXM

Overall: The set had as many ups as downs, but I did a good job of calling out the situations that occurred during the set (the guy moving at the start, the “awwwing” at coke and the woman not paying attention) and most of the crowd seemed to be along for the ride.

Friday Open Mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AbGL5ojSeZg

0m27s Try to introduce this character

0m42s Say “crazy” not “murderous rage”

1m32s Commit more to the “blurry blurry dark dark” bit

3m38s After “I haven’t done it in a while” add on “and now I remember why”

Overall: The sand joke and the immigrant excuse joke both need work

The Music and Comedy Late Night Mic Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LjUfsJzYUUA

0m16s That’s a great way to be likeable right away

0m33s It was funny when I said it in conversation, but it didn’t work on stage

2m50s This is working really well

3m23s Get rid of the “had to get a drink of water”

4m09s That didn’t deserve an applause break, but I’ll take it

5m09s Get rid of the mail/queue part

5m38s I did the “remix” thing enough times until it got funny

7m28s Get rid of the restaurant like girls comparison

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1SZbZfAyyq8

0m43s Change to “hire a hit man”

3m57s If the tap dancing gets a big laugh, I need a different line than “I’m in the market for a new mom”

4m46s Put more emotion behind “we didn’t even own a chess set”

7m03s I need to figure out a way to do this joke without seeming mean

7m53s The gym joke is much weaker than the rest of my mom material

8m28s This didn’t work cause I had already been a little mean on my last joke

Overall: Really solid set, I just need to be careful about not losing the audience by going too mean without justification.

An open mic with six comedians

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JDO-rGja1wc

0m35s No need for “murderous rage” I can just say “drive me crazy”

2m12s I can get rid of the “2 seconds, 3 seconds” part

2m53s The numbers should be with two digits, not three digits, it’s less syllables

5m29s Get rid of the restaurant part

5m41s This is the second round of open mic

8m09s Change “community service” to “public service”

Overall: I powered through an open mic and although the other comics aren’t really laughing, I can still see what parts of jokes can be cut

My bar show, about six people listening

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5SGFCijXXuE

1m59s I could’ve addressed them sooner

6m12s Ask them about their photos since they volunteered “you wanna see ours”

7m37s The first two times I say “this is a photo of the sand” should be without emphasis on a specific word

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bqZCX36R5CA

1m32s Kill this part of the joke

1m41s Add “a vacation from gainful employment”

Overall: I powered through my material in a loud room, got some laughs and was able to engage most of the audience into listening to at least part of my act. Aka, this could’ve been worse.