The 8pm show for 15 people or so
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mArRG9P-_BI
2m04s Go into questioning her wohoo more, “do you like to be intimidated by parental figures, or what?”
4m04s Say the line a little softer
7m01s More emphasis on “and”
Overall: Good consistent set, nothing amazing though.
Hosting the writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pcY-lVr-ih8
1m08s Say “look it into the glove” not “watch it into the glove”
2m01s More emphasis on “and”
3m15s Change “the line for bread” to “bread line”
Overall: Decent for opening a mic. New anti-marriage bit at the end has potential.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lrSFP23vHQU
0m24s Combining the words and hand motion doesn’t work
1m20s Make it sound more like a statement
4m41s That’s the best the immigrant joke has done to date
8m15s Milk the head down for longer
9m17s Don’t bumble the delivery mid sentence, it’ll ruin the punch line
Overall: Good set, new stuff worked fairly well until I stumbled on a line towards the end
Closing out the 10pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ognsGy2d1Nc
1m27s Good job responding
1m53s And then milking the interruption for another 20 seconds, until I can bring it back into the original joke
2m43s Add “he’s like” before “you’re making good points”
4m11s Nice improvised addition
4m41s There was loud yelling in the hallway, that turned into something physical
6m08s Nothing like a 90 second hallway distraction to keep things interesting
6m35s Good job refocusing them
9m14s Nice improvised callback
10m34 Say “to your” not “to a”
10m52s Milk the sadness for a second longer before bringing my head back up
Overall: Great set especially considering the minor melee/dispute in the hallway that happened in the middle. I improvised and rolled with it, wasn’t fazed and then brought the crowd back to focus on my set.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zRPoakZLNfs
2m33s It should be “hurricane” not rain
4m18s Didn’t need that line, as it got a decent laugh
7m50s The Kazaam joke needs smoother delivery throughout, it’s still a little choppy
Overall: Good but not great.
