Category: Comedy

Going towards the end of a music mic

httpv://youtu.be/EIOXkDFI3zA

1m53s Try putting more emphasis on “remember”

3m47s No need for a full pause between “team” and “four years”

4m01s Change or cut the “drug test” line

5m47s Could’ve made fun of her going on a first date in a hotel more

6m20s Pause longer after “I liked the last one more”

7m22s Find a better “all the enthusiasm of _” line, perhaps dead puppies?

9m29s I could’ve done my “I guess everyone went to University of Phoenix Online” save line

Overall: Good solid set, just need to change/cut a couple of lines.

Going last 2.5 hours into a show

httpv://youtu.be/nkTo4PU-K6k

0m06s No need to repeat “it does”

2m48s Need a better response when they dispute their cycle of sadness

3m05s Cut this line

3m27s Cut the whole phone charger joke when doing a tight set

3m58s Good to interact and go off script

5m07s Say “fail” instead of “end”

5m35s Change “he doesn’t have advanced degree” to “he has no future”

5m57s Say this sentence clearer

Overall: Ok response considering half of the already small crowd had left. Need to cut some stuff in the middle.

Doing the check spot on the 10pm show

httpv://youtu.be/Au7AGpzapb0

0m40s Need a better response for when someone names a “smart” school

3m55s If they say no to that question, I can say “someone’s a baller”

Overall: Good for checks. The talking stayed to a minimum and there were at least some laughs in most places and I didn’t have to address the checks being out

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/wHnG8qeRGc0

0m05s Say “thank you” directly into the mic after the applause dies down, instead of during

0m52s I need a better response for when they name a good school

2m19s Weird that “on the plane” got no laugh, try enunciating each word for delivery

6m11s Smile a little more while saying this

9m17s Find a stronger end to that joke

11m53s I could do a more colorful metaphor for “with all the enthusiasm”

12m15s Can cut out the relighting the candle part in a tight set

12m48s Good save at the end, but the end of the song should hit harder

Overall: Good set with consistent laughs but too many of the jokes ended weakly. Rework the endings or end each joke sooner.

A 10pm show with the camera 60 feet away picking up too much background noise

httpv://youtu.be/e8elZyWgyJw

0m42s More emphasis on “somebody”

3m51s Eyes need to be moving the whole time, don’t wait on the audience to laugh

5m45s Give her an extra half second to respond after “what are you up to later?”

7m52s The eyes should never stop moving

8m04s Scan the whole room, and maybe give a maniacal laugh, then get off stage, so that it’s more dramatic at the end

Overall: Mediocre. It was an up and down set that had some big laughs but way too many slow spots.