Category: Comedy

This is the same night as the previous critique but with a different, and much better crowd.

0m47s The robbery bit definitely needs to go. 

0m57s I lied, I’m sober. But it’s a good excuse if you’re ever accused of mumbling. 

2m08s More excitement about “Puppies for Yuppies” I need to pretend like I’m the narrator for a TV commercial about it. 

2m51s I took an extra long pause because the door swung open and it’s loud outside. I’m starting to get the hang of adjusting punchlines and timing to make sure everyone can hear it. 

5m29s One third of the fifteen people in attendance just got up and started to leave. 

5m47s I later found out they were actually here or a different show and were just hanging out waiting for that one to start. 

Overall: I’m most proud that I’m learning how to wait for the door to close before delivering a punchline so that everyone can hear it. I know I’ve said lots of times that the audience shouldn’t matter to a true professional, but I think I did pretty much the same material with the same delivery two shows in a row (see performance critique 37) and this time I got a much better response. So I have a long way to go until I’m a “true professional”.

This was an open mic with 2 audience members.

0m18s I don’t actually hate jews. And I am a jew. I was just playing with tension. 

0m31s I need to deliver this differently… I’m still figuring out the how… and maybe I should use the word “scared” instead of “concerned” when starting this joke, even if they’re not. 

2m55s I rushed the delivery. 

3m54s It doesn’t get any more wordy than “That is not how we educate our childrens youth about what not to do.” Something like “There’s a better way to set an example for kids” would be easier on the brain. 

6m15s For some reason I’ve been getting tongue twisted recently with “I think she was overestimating”, I have no idea why. 

7m17s Things go wrong in threes… 

7m44s I was only talking about comedy technique because the only 2 audience members were new comics who just hadn’t heard my material yet, I’d never go into it if there was a real audience there. 

9m58s I have a second video that goes on for another 20 seconds but it’s not worth making this post longer for it. 

Overall: This was good stage time. The newer stuff needs more practice.

I hosted an open mic after a Mardi Gras party that had about 10 people in the audience. I pulled in the 4 chatty girls that are sitting up front. That’s 9 overly engaged audience members in a row.

1m32s The subway joke works best if I first beatbox while I grind the pole, then go into my crazy voice for the second time. 

2m18s There was no need to finish my subway joke at that point. 

3m56s When I asked if purple held special significance, I was thinking about making a Barney the Dinosaur joke, but decided against it because the girl was a little chubby… 

4m48s I hope I haven’t scarred you, my reader. 

4m58s I should again repeat that she’s on it, and heighten by saying she’s the number one rated dater or something. 

5m51s This is the second time someone has mentioned a dead or dying dog. I still don’t have a good way to address this and am open to suggestions. 

5m55s Accusing them of lying is not a good way to go about it.

PART 2

1m03s Great job calling out what just happened. When I was watching this video I thought “I hope I said something about that “yeaaaah”” 

1m23s She bought me a shot so I drank and introduced people

PART 3

0m38s Funny cause its true

1m20s I should’ve replied to the comment of “they’re both fruity drinks”. 

Overall: I did okay hosting but had a talk with the owner later about how to be a better host. You can find that post here. I plan on using these tips and being a better host next time I do it.