Category: Comedy

Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v7ZVa4-GhPc

0m12s This is a joke only for open mics

0m47s Sometimes I write a joke to be clever instead of funny, most of my alliteration jokes fall into this category, and this is a prime example

1m24s Good commitment to the pregnant pause

1m42s Rephrase it “but to get it, I had to wait in line”

2m09s Stop changing voices in mid sentence

3m08s This is another instance of “clever instead of funny.” This joke needs to be rewritten.

Overall: The CT monocle joke has potential, as does the pregnant pause. Punch Polo Shirt needs to go to the trash heap and “DaVinci? Da Bears” needs to be rewritten or trashed.

The Saturday Night Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9FG_rxglr8Q

0m34s I love how someone is actually “hissing” after half a joke

1m51s Surprising they laughed at that after not laughing at the previous 5 punch lines, but I’m not complaining

2m18s No need to go into crowd work here or call out people on being slow

4m43s I need to do a stronger act out of a model

5m17s Change the emphasis in “for a pamphlet” to put more emphasis on “for a”

5m45s I should’ve stayed with the mom material as this crowd is uptight and not a fan of sexual stuff, bad read on my part

6m46s The whole Yelp joke ate it, but at least I forced a little bit of a laugh before getting off stage

Overall: I did the same material as last night and got a much weaker response. My opening joke is a little risky, so if the crowd doesn’t go for the sexual stuff I stand a chance of losing them right away and that’s what happened tonight. Of course, I didn’t realize this at the time and went back to a super sexual joke at the end. Whoops!

A Saturday afternoon mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7hqrOXAC27w

0m24s No need to acknowledge “it took you a second”

1m28s Cut the third part “and crying into the pillow she used to sleep on”

2m15s Don’t pause after “Yuri”

3m40s Do a clearer knock

3m55s Stumbling over words, this is what happens when you change too much stuff at once

5m05s It seems awkward to change voices in mid sentence

Overall: It was average open mic amount of laughs. I’m practicing the new version of my “good” jokes at the open mics so I don’t stumble on words during a show. Some of the lines still need to be adjusted and cut, but that’s normal for whenever new stuff is added.

The Friday night show at which I’m auditioning for the club owner

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cf8VTtqO8o0

1m00s Change “Ilya couldn’t be happier” to something funny

1m45s Get rid of the “crying into a pillow”

2m52s I might need to be less specific and just change it to “hire a hitman”

3m10s Pause longer between each part of my mom’s talking

3m48s Applause breaks during auditions are always nice

4m23s Do a quick knocking sound into the mic first

4m33s Change “power of exfoliating” to something funny

Overall: This went great and is the first set where how I remember it going when getting off stage is the same as how it looks on tape. I got laughs everywhere but in the “Ilya couldn’t be happier” and “power of exfoliation” lines which I will be removing.