Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v7ZVa4-GhPc
0m12s This is a joke only for open mics
0m47s Sometimes I write a joke to be clever instead of funny, most of my alliteration jokes fall into this category, and this is a prime example
1m24s Good commitment to the pregnant pause
1m42s Rephrase it “but to get it, I had to wait in line”
2m09s Stop changing voices in mid sentence
3m08s This is another instance of “clever instead of funny.” This joke needs to be rewritten.
Overall: The CT monocle joke has potential, as does the pregnant pause. Punch Polo Shirt needs to go to the trash heap and “DaVinci? Da Bears” needs to be rewritten or trashed.
