Category: Comedy

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LMWt02im7RE

0m18s I missed the word “van”

0m57s Don’t pause after “contract”

1m34s Kill “kid trucks”

2m08s Rephrase to “ohh, yeah, Cats, the musical”

2m59s Think of something better than Gucci dress

3m59s I don’t like the fluctuating god joke

5m11s I need to get to the “less liquid” part sooner

6m07s Play up each of the grains of sand more

Overall: The mobile adoption center needs to be tightened, I can get rid of the fluctuating belief in god and the sand bit still needs to be figured out

MCing the Sunday Writers Mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8RmbvK2TI7g

0m20s Slow down and sound more confused

0m32s Reword to “van full of kids”

0m41s Slow down!

0m51s Get rid of the bike messenger part

1m18s Kill international part

1m38s Kill the king cone part

2m20s Say “when you got singing kids with cell phones” instead

Overall: I worked out one new joke and can already see which parts need to go, I need to slow WAY down on this joke though and play up my confusion

The Saturday night show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8nvhvcnljxM

0m10s Stop calling out the bad claps, or figure out a funnier way to do it

1m18s Turn my head to another part of the room before saying “in the first hour”

4m06s First laugh of the sand joke, forty seconds in, that’s too long before a laugh

4m16s Do three pictures, not four

4m31s Second laugh, took another 25 seconds

5m31s That got a good response, but it was too long between laughs

5m50s Cut the seconds part

6m08s A fourth laugh in 2.5 minutes, this joke needs serious tightening

6m10s Brought them back

7m19s Don’t do the “table 2” cough

8m28s Cut the eucharist

8m59s Get rid of “for a pamphlet”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XErFmJjoPhU

1m09s Take a more thoughtful pause

Overall: The old stuff worked well and I can now see where the photo joke needs tightening

A Saturday afternoon open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TulTHW6TofI

2m10s Do the phone camera part sooner

2m55s I like the pause and going to more fast paced call backs of “blurry blurry dark dark”

3m40s I can stop saying “page” sooner and just count numbers

4m15s Don’t smile or laugh, fully commit to the bit

4m50s At least I’m having fun

Overall: I did a five minute long joke and stayed committed to it even when it wasn’t hitting so well. Pulling out the phone and taking a photo is funny and I should do that sooner.

A check spot on a Friday night

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IT5yJdVJMJ0

2m04s Saying I’ll be flirting with the girls makes the guys pay attention

4m50s I can probably get rid of “the eucharist” part

Overall: This was really solid for a check spot. The audience was noisy for a little bit but I got them paying attention and laughing as soon as they finished paying bills.