An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mM0WqSZpD5Y
0m40s It should be “Hey Jenny” not “hey”
1m30s Decent improvised lines
1m51s Try the line as “married people know what I mean”
3m03s Cut this line
4m51s It should be “Enjoy YOUR ride” not “the ride”
5m07s I missed the word “online” before survey
Overall: Keep rewriting the material.
Hosting the writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IlPMixXrInI
2m53s Cut the agent line
3m17s Get to “castrate them” quicker
4m23s Change this set up to, “It seems that there’s more gay people now then there ever were. I think guys just…”
6m10s Change “like” to “are into”
6m26s No need for the grandpa line
Overall: Still reworking old jokes with new tags. They’re getting tighter but still need more rewriting.
MCing an open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hjKi07Hdo1k
2m22s Cut the agent line
3m14s Say it more seductively
Overall: Eh. The New Years joke is getting shorter, but needs to get even shorter.
The 8PM Show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HyDfYv12VBs
2m57s Good pause there, that laugh wasn’t there two weeks ago
3m30s Say “cmon” before “right” when the audience isn’t fully with me on that
4m34s Pause after “DVD”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x0oUNgVD2AA
1m07s A little more emphasis on “all”
2m53s Good delivery on the line
4m57s Great job setting up the crowd on a groan to instantly bring them back
5m40s The million point bonus joke has yet to work on a crowd
Overall: Great set. I got 4 or 5 applause breaks and strong laughs throughout (except for one joke that missed).
A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PfRQ84cxOPk
0m16s No need for that start, I’m the only one who’d find that funny
1m22s Try “Barrack Obama” instead of “The New York Times”
2m07s Repeat his “okay” before “that could be kinda fun”
3m16s Instead of “always stay loyal to us” it should be “ONLY stay loyal”
3m45s Deliver this line seductively
3m52s This line doesn’t make sense here
5m45s Cut this whole girl at party story
7m05s Instead of “everything is great after that” I can say “it’s gonna be a fantastic year”
8m11s Smile a little while doing the poem
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oz0_43ZX4dw
0m38s Only sing the first line of the song, no need for the parody
0m55s Do the guard pole motion multiple times
Overall: I’m reworking some older jokes, and they still need work.
