The 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/AaxqWSeJbO8
0m06s Say “thank you” or “hi” first
2m06s Say the line smoothly
3m26s Add “in this country” after “make a difference”
3m52s Give it another second before saying it got preachy
5m33s Might want to slow down the candle part
Overall: Good short set
Going first at a bar show for 10 or so people
httpv://youtu.be/z_ETRXNkieI
1m59s Say “role model” instead of competition
3m15s Better to ease into this bit with continued crowd work if the flow is already interrupted
5m43s More emphasis on second “ever”
6m46s Decent save line
9m00s Strongly consider cutting the unconditional love line, it rarely works
Overall: Decent for going first for a small crowd. Couple of light applause breaks and consistent low laughs.
Going up last at a music and comedy mic for 8 or so people
httpv://youtu.be/p52A0-30j5Y
6m27s Find better word for the coverage line
6m55s The settle down is much weaker than what I previously had
8m21s Don’t stumble on the line
9m52s More emphasis on the word “animal”
10m20s Say “your host” before the name
Overall: Eh. I had low consistent laughs at the start then good consistent laughs for the last 3-5 minutes.
Going up towards the end of an 8:30 show for 8 or 10 people
httpv://youtu.be/FV3xpzskE3w
0m48s Cut the “we’re gonna have fun” line
Overall: Pretty terrible. Barely got any laughs and I didn’t try to bring them in with crowd work.
Going up second with a particularly chatty audience
httpv://youtu.be/61-NwMIM7HI
0m52s Emphasize the word “AND”
4m54s Don’t go up on the word “mom”
5m30s I missed the end of that joke about “now she’s looking at me like ‘maybe I do wanna marry you’”
6m03s Get more worked up
Overall: Not a great set but did a decent job dealing with all the talking and interruptions.
