Tag: Critiques

MCing the 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/KQNkE87f6-g

0m30s Contrasting colors first then the date thing

2m04s Could even do a dance gang act out

2m58s Nice piece of discovery about an audience member

4m04s Great timing on that

5m18s Try to make this bit more conversational while in an MC set, maybe ask the audience a question to go into it

5m38s Still works though

7m44s Good job bringing it back to a previous crowd interaction

9m48s Doing the check spot

10m40s Try starting with my hand low and then bringing it up for “high light”

12m02s Say “and he’s singing the happy birthday song” instead of “singing it”

12m50s Might want to cut the “how cold are you now” line

13m39s Could’ve pointed out it’s a pot delay

Overall: Great job MCing. Did four or five minutes of crowd work up front before going into material and then weaved in and out of material and crowd work. And I got good laughs during the check spot too.

Doing checks on the 10pm show

httpv://youtu.be/wpVympIKAeg

0m22s Change the delivery on “don’t throw your iPhone”

1m24s Say “maybe” more forcefully

2m48s That was fun and in the moment

5m22s Great reaction to his comment

5m47s Combine the truck stop with the one year deal

7m30s Hit the line more outraged/sarcastic

Overall: Great for a check spot. Stayed in the moment and got strong laughs for most of it.

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/R2nQTvDxiTo

3m52s Smile a little more on the line

4m33s Talking a little fast

4m58s Say “last one” instead of “previous one” and only need to say “Ben” once not twice

6m01s Don’t do the save line if I got some laughs, it doesn’t make sense, even if it feels like bombing

6m51s Find a better end to the enthusiasm line

7m00s More emphasis on “adopted”

Overall: Eh. Mostly consistent laughs, but not very loud or long. The video doesn’t look as bad as it felt at the time though.

A bar show for about ten people

httpv://youtu.be/OQhRO5JLhvQ

 0m33s If emphasizing “Russian” also emphasize “immigrant”

2m30s Say “and I’m like” louder

3m31s Needs a better punch than “drug tested”

5m28s Say “last one” instead of “previous”

6m34s Find a better analogy for enthusiasm

Overall: Eh, got some laughs but could’ve been a lot stronger.

Going towards the end of a music mic

httpv://youtu.be/EIOXkDFI3zA

1m53s Try putting more emphasis on “remember”

3m47s No need for a full pause between “team” and “four years”

4m01s Change or cut the “drug test” line

5m47s Could’ve made fun of her going on a first date in a hotel more

6m20s Pause longer after “I liked the last one more”

7m22s Find a better “all the enthusiasm of _” line, perhaps dead puppies?

9m29s I could’ve done my “I guess everyone went to University of Phoenix Online” save line

Overall: Good solid set, just need to change/cut a couple of lines.