Tag: Critiques

This is me back in NYC and MCing for a crowd of 10 to 12 

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tx-V6uwn-08

0m54s I need to work on my responses for what people do for work 

1m51s That worked much better the first time I said it… 

2m55s I’m asking too many questions without making funny statements 

3m30s I should change this line to “before I know it, I’m on a date with a girl from the circus” 

5m41s No reason to pause after the word “protesting” 

6m47s I had to repeat it because he didn’t hear me

Overall: I really need to improve my crowd work so that I have good responses for when people answer my questions. Besides the crowd work thing, this was an okay set as it’s really hard to destroy a room as a host.

This is me back in DC and hosting. Crowd of 6 people. 

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tKV73FDdDN4

1m07s Much better crowd work then the last time I hosted (May 9) 

1m50s It seems to work better when I talk to two different groups then do some jokes, instead of only one group of people 

2m15s Wrong tone for “that is sexist” 

3m22s One thousand at a time is more like it 

5m50s True study, it was in a book on body language I read 

6m18s I think they laughed because they don’t look like your typical pot smoker 

7m37s It’s not a good sign for her career prospects if she only got the joke after I explained how bad the economy is 

9m05s I can’t decide if this is too much talking / setup or if it’s actually good when it’s a small crowd 

9m37s The couple turned and looked at each other. I should’ve pursued it further 

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xLcsgr-8QoE 

0m35s The wording could be a little tighter 

1m25s They liked it until the last punch line, not sure why it didn’t work this time. This would’ve been a good spot for “if someone doesn’t laugh, I just assume they’re death” 

3m24s I could’ve paused a little longer 

3m45s I should’ve said “DC” instead of “New York” because of the location of the club 

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xaupy5YkqSk 

I did a few more jokes in between some comics 

0m25s I’m riffing on the previous comics joke about fancy wine 

0m50s I finally got people to move closer to the stage 

2m22s I should strum an air guitar for a second 

2m44s Punch line isn’t at the end of this joke 

Overall: I did a decent job of hosting and was able to do fifteen minutes up front without looking at my notes

This is me at the feedback mic.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ih6ohA3E-ac

0m18s Boring joke, first and last time I tried this 

1m04s I need the “she’d totally date you” to come before “fuck the kid with the guitar” 

1m35s I won’t be telling this joke again 

2m10s I should try “don’t brag about your crimes to girls” as the premise for this joke 

2m48s This is an old joke that I tried to rewrite, it didn’t work 

2m55s I like the pregnant one liner 

3m25s This part still needs work, but there are more punch lines here 

Overall: I tried out 3 minutes of new or rewritten jokes. The pregnant joke is good as is, crime for dummies has potential, and the kid with a guitar needs to be tried again. The other three new jokes are being put out to pasture. 1 out of 6 (possibly 2 out of 6) isn’t bad.

This is the second show of the night, and I hosted it. There were around 10 people there.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vhr2UoucpoE

0m18s I find that getting them to clap twice builds a more compliance 

0m50s No idea what she said, but I should’ve done a joke about it 

2m05s I’m trying to do one bit of crowd work and then a joke instead of a couple parts of crowd work followed by a couple of jokes 

3m07s Worst crowd work ever “So Cal, so cool” 

3m31s Stumbling over words 

6m31s I love it when my last three punch lines get zero laughs 

Overall: I did a terrible job with crowd work and none of the jokes hit either. I was too affected by my perception of the previous set that night (which in retrospect was amazing compared to this one). I need to work on getting more of a relief pitcher’s mentality where I forget the set as soon as I get off stage instead of letting it linger in my head. I can do this no problem when it’s the next day, but doing it for the same night needs work.

This is me back in NYC for a crowd of around ten people.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qnM9kgVUF-E

0m34s This is the quickest I’ve gone into the fallopian tubes joke, I’m still debating whether the audience needs to be accustomed to me for a few more seconds before going to this joke

1m50s Weird place for me to take a pause

2m05s Since the crowd interrupted with approval I didn’t need to say “too” after “I was creeped out”

2m14s I pointed to myself at the wrong time, I should point when I say “for Jewish people”

3m07s I like my reaction to someone “awwwing”

3m43s This crowd is a little slower then usual

3m55s First time all three punch lines worked in a row

4m15s I need to change my tone for “I don’t mean to give the game away”

4m24s I forgot “all night long”

5m05s I need to look up when I say that

5m22s Now that’s a good MC

Overall: The jdate joke did well, and it looks like I did better on the video than I actually felt when I did. (Hence my ending the set with “they’re gonna go molest me now”).