I did two mics in one night as I wanted to get as much stage time as possible before doing the real show. This is another open mic.
2m15s More emphasis on the word “own”.
2m43s Wait until the laughing is done, even if there’s no reason they should still be laughing. A second round of contagious laughter could start.
4m14s It might work better to say “If you get up on stage right now and start making out with me, you got Huge Tubes”.
Overall: My pacing was good and I managed to look up most of the time. I’m not sure if I have less comments because this is the 4th video I’ve typed about in a row or if I was steadily improving throughout the week.