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Performance Critique: June 24b

The late night music and comedy mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DAQ_pVbE5GA

1m52s Tighten “guys you feel lukewarm about” to one or two words

4m06s Get rid of the “remix” thing

7m38s That’s an awesome shut down line

8m36s Change the tag

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ra2TkcSmXkg

2m25s I need the word “cause” before “Jesus would’ve wanted”

3m06s I don’t need “for son” at the end of the sentence

5m04s Change “just as much” to “more than”

Overall: Decent considering it was past 4am. And my stop talking line made me laugh when re-watching the video.

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