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Performance Critique: July 3

A Saturday 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AhQMuuER4Zw

1m49s Look up a little more

4m03s I need a different punchline

4m25s Say “audience member” not “audience”

5m03s Cut this punchline

6m16s No need for the third “I believe you”

6m42s The funnier full line would be “I think I’d run out of here… with twenty bucks”

7m29s Pause longer between each “nobody believes me”

Overall: Ehh. The Jewel joke is hurting my set.

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