This is a paying audience at the place where I bark. I think there were about 10 people in the crowd.
0m32s I don’t need to say “most people get into stand up because…” I can just go straight into why I got into it.
1m27s I need to hold my hand out there for 2 seconds after I finish my line.
1m38s I need to go to my punchline before the audience member can respond, or else the punch gets flattened. I also shouldn’t have ignored his comment. I thought that would work because a different time I responded then went on with my joke and it didn’t work out so well. I think the best way to do it next time is to address the situation then go back by saying “I guess you weren’t laughing a minute ago because you love sweaters.”
1m56s I think the “dot com” after “puppies for yuppies” is a failed experiment. People either get the joke or they don’t.
3m30s The teenager in the front row was making like he was a pimp. I did the best I could with a reaction.
3m42s While saying “this joke will bomb” got a laugh, the actual joke didn’t because I communicated it wasn’t funny. Next time I should play it up, like, “since it doesn’t happen to you, this will be even funnier.”
5m04s I could get rid of the line “I’ve been dating around and”. Just start with “I met a new dating personality…”
5m30s If the audience member replies with a “yes I have”, I should phrase my next line in the form of a question: “Isn’t that so demasculating?”
5m50s Pause for a second or two after “fan base” to try to draw out one last laugh.
Overall: A true professional comic would’ve been able to make this small dispersed crowd laugh their heads off. I’m not that level yet but I didn’t bomb either. There’s also room for me to tighten up some jokes and plenty of ways to improve my crowd work.
