Category: Performance Critiques

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/Q6Fpu9zTnBo

1m21s Try being more shocked by how he looks

3m12s Film studies isn’t a punch line

4m10s Smile a little more on the shoes line

4m59s Need a better end line than complain from your yacht

5m26s It was actually okay, I didn’t need to acknowledge the weaker end as it didn’t totally miss

6m33s If the audience member disagrees about being in the same cycle, don’t force the cycles in sync line

7m56s Do the “yeah right” look for longer

8m15s Should’ve improvised off of her not wanting to date me instead of forcing the material, I was trying to close my set

8m44s Decent acknowledgement of what she previously said at the end of the bit

Overall: Good set where my new joke did the best it’s done to date.

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/OWTKUFzicLE

1m23s People came in during my first bit, I didn’t want to interrupt it but addressed it right after

6m16s Good job milking the expression

6m57s Open my eyes wider while doing the kissy face

9m27s Good job “yes anding” an audience suggestion with a part of the bit I don’t usually do anymore

Overall: Great 13 minute set with solid laughs throughout. Good job being interactive with the audience while still doing mostly material.

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/AyKHNC-JCLk

1m37s Get rid of “to call”

2m31s Say this line smiling, not pissed off

2m55s Find a better voice, this one sounds too stupid, it should sound privileged

7m02s If it’s not a long set, I should cut the joke after “buttons barely respond to my touch”

Overall: Okay set but the new joke in the middle mostly missed

The 10pm show

httpv://youtu.be/f1whpdaOVyk

1m47s Cut the poking on “do your homework”

3m47s Setup comes out of nowhere and feels weird

8m20s Say “get on board” more playfully

Overall: Good start and end, but the new bit in the middle struggled

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/_895t_XoJRo

1m24s Get rid of the finger poke on “do your homework”

3m39s Weird non transition into this

3m47s Cut film studies, go straight to the school

4m24s Cut the child militia line

5m55s Should’ve bailed on the joke at this point instead of daring them to hate the joke

Overall: The material that works worked, and the new bit in the middle missed hard. Need to rewrite that. But at least I was able to bring it back.