Sunday Writer’s Mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TNpZvlggzpc
0m28s I decided to do an old joke but got into it from a different angle
1m27s The last word should be “pronto”
1m51s No need for the word “prolific” as it slows down the joke and is just showing off alliteration without being funny
2m18s Instead of “she” say “my mom”
Overall: The old jokes didn’t really hit and the reworking of the pot joke needs a tighter setup.
Saturday Night Show, I’m the last comic up
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6UQLaLm9-xQ
0m51s No idea what she said
1m59s Drag out the “yes” for a little longer
5m01s I missed the “parents don’t care what you do, they just wanna brag about it” joke
5m24s I missed the delivery on the Medicare line
Overall: Short yet solid set with good laughs. I could’ve delivered some lines better.
Saturday afternoon open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LS6b92yTPlQ
0m41s Hold the shocked face for another two seconds
1m15s Pause for another second after, “that didn’t really happen”
1m33s The 401k wording is slightly awkward
2m40s An applause break at an open mic, that’s rare
3m17s Do better object work for each of the motions I perform
Overall: Decent. I worked out jokes that I’ve been doing but still need some work.
Friday night show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FzOs8si7Ouk
1m02s Move my head straight across, don’t dip it down
2m25s First good laugh of the set
4m29s Pause for another half second
4m37s Bad restart to the joke, but it still worked
4m49s I should’ve talked to the pregnant woman after “my mom didn’t pretend”
5m20s I’m looking down too much
5m52s I should be doing this joke more often
6m15s I forgot the “can’t share the spotlight” part of the joke
Overall: Decent set but not amazing. I got consistent laughs but only big laughs in 3 or 4 places. I need to pause for another second for the “ladies, ever pretend you’re pregnant?” question. And if someone answers, I need to either ignore it and deliver my punch line, or go back to setting up the joke again.
A Thursday Open Mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XqWc6tnKYKk
0m43s Better response “I need to get a price plus card”
1m22s Always good when the set gets derailed by the MC
1m40s Better to say “babies are harmful” or “babies are dangerous”
2m47s Good pause length so that everyone catches up
3m07s I should do this smiling and jumping around more
4m10s Try moving my hand from down to up instead of up to down
4m37s Start scrolling slow then speed it up
Overall: I’m working out newer but usable jokes and it wasn’t terrible for an open mic. I need to change some words and hand motions, but most of these jokes are ready for real shows.
