Category: Performance Critiques

At a bar show I co-produce

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7kW9j6RVS5o

0m07s I asked to be introduced like that because it was a bunch of poets in the crowd

0m57s When it’s a 3-4 people as the crowd, you need to talk to them before doing jokes

1m54s Change “your” to “our” to keep them on my side

3m27s Acknowledge the phone sooner

3m55s Act out her saying “a full house of umbrella drinks”

4m25s This should go before the poker table

6m50s That’s a good line

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FDYR8udYwLs

0m44s I need a different line instead of “I’m in the market for a new mom”

4m36s That’s bad, cut it or get a different answer

Overall: Considering it was a four person audience, the vacation photos joke went over really well, I need to keep working on it.

The writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j6M8nMN10jw

1m16s I did the whole old joke to try out this new part, whether this new part works is still inconclusive

4m07s I might not need this part, I can just say “you have to go to the gym and run on the machine” and then go straight to her last line

Overall: Working out some newer stuff, keep working

The Saturday 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0JJmjoGhKtA

2m29s I should’ve called them out on echoing me a second time

5m29s The “in the moment” comments always get the biggest laughs

Overall: Solid set

Saturday afternoon open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ff7QZA0stMw

0m21s Change “your” to “our”

2m19s Get rid of the seconds part

3m54s It should be “in the market” not “on the market”

Overall: Working out newer jokes, there wasn’t much response at this mic, but I can still see what parts can be fixed

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f-_59X6226Y

3m06s Good job getting an unscripted laugh to get out of a joke half failing

7m29s Kill the restaurant to girl comparison

7m42s Good job ending on a laugh

Overall: This was a weak set. I’m getting small laughs throughout, which is better than no laughs, but there wasn’t a single big group laugh during my set.