A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QLjwuzu6RM0
0m22s That would’ve been hysterical if I hit the line right away
4m33s This joke needs to be MUCH shorter
4m43s Change “disliking” to “hating”
6m23s Wow this joke is still going? Even I zoned out watching it back
7m01s True story
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FgHS95FvEjc
2m39s Change “prom dress” to “duct tape”
Overall: Eh. That six minute sand joke REALLY needs to be shorter. I could barely watch it and I wrote it.
Headlining my Queens bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HtqN9mqqxVg
1m06s Start shaking hands before starting to talk
2m16s Good improvised line
3m34s Change meth to crack
5m54s I need better examples
6m03s Good callback to the improvised waterfalls line
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vOKFwCH25tg
0m35s I love that the jokes are hit or miss but the crowd work is on
2m23s I forgot to say “about me making money”
3m03s Rephrase “glamour gods wanna know”
3m55s Good callback
4m15s If only my jokes went over as well as this stuff
8m34s That’s messed up but funny
Overall: Good job interacting with the crowd and making lots of callbacks to organic things that happened during the set.
An open mic with five or six comics
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SfAlnyouf2c
1m02s It’s not clear I was in a car
1m33s Cut down “play with fire” to one word
3m31s Nice job pointing to the craziest looking person in the room
4m59s Smile a little after that
Overall: Worked out some jokes that still need work.
A Sunday night show with 6 or 8 audience members
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wTwelq8V9wY
0m12s People were leaving before I got brought up
3m45s Instead of “do that” say “make a website like that”
Overall: Ehhh. I bombed for the first four minutes but then I slowly brought them back. I should start talking to the audience and interacting about the joke more when the material isn’t hitting.
The Sunday Writers Mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WA2kgxM6PsM
0m28s My lines are choppy, memorize things a little better or just go with inexact flow
2m12s Get rid of “for son”
2m49s Clean up the sentence to have less words in it
Overall: Working out some newer jokes.
