Going up towards the end of a 7pm show
httpv://youtu.be/hcaWdl3mvYY
1m33s I butchered that line and didn’t set it up with the PhD drop out bit, whoops
2m31s Weird pointing motion, point across my body, not the same side
4m28s Life support is funnier than nursing home
5m03s Weird that the English line totally missed, doesn’t happen often
Overall: Some decent laughs, but overall mediocre
Opening a 430 show
httpv://youtu.be/-CjlJVFK73g
0m47s Do a better drink mime motion
1m03s And that’s why I no longer open with this joke
2m25s The “weight of failed expectations” line is doing well, good job bringing it back
6m01s That’s the level of laughs the rest of the set should’ve been
Overall: Weak set, it doesn’t look like I’m in the room.
Opening a 2pm show for a light crowd
httpv://youtu.be/wXjAqsiBnto
1m33s Whisper the “maybe”
2m51s Be more playful with “I see you’re all on her side”
4m01s Rewrite the “maybe when we’re married” line
6m58s More emphasis on “realized”
Overall: Weak set.
Doing a check spot on the 10pm show
httpv://youtu.be/QVTH7cXBhkU
3m37s Not sure if the suicide line fits here
4m12s Instead of “all over the world” say “the world is full of”
4m32s Might wanna repeat what SEFF stands for before the first example
5m08s Rework the one room and heat lines
5m23s Find a better ending here
6m03s Say the first syllable of global
Overall: Mediocre response.
The 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/oc_s7DP4SHM
3m05s Put hand on hip for “thanks” not earlier
4m14s Needs a stronger punch line
5m08s Replace the one room line
5m16s “Eating daily” not funny enough, go back to looking both ways
5m34s Needs a better line then quitting grad school
5m50s Cut or rewrite the America line
7m02s Not sure that “we’re not married” is strong enough
8m37s Say “get on board” more playfully
9m19s Could’ve gone and asked which of those complaints apply
Overall: Started strong and ended strong and worked on a new bit in the middle, that needs more work
