An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mGUT_vjFUm8
0m23s Change “that’s not true” to “that’s not fully accurate”
1m12s Kill the last four sentences
2m32s The no hitter should be the first card
4m12s Wait for the laugh before proceeding
5m08s Kill the “girls like restaurants” stuff
Overall: The first half of the Netflix joke is good, but the rest of the new material needs rewriting.
Doing a set at my bar show in Queens for a “crowd” of four
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sXx977r-SW4
2m13s My tone of voice has been slightly miserable the whole time, a slight smile or better tone could help
3m28s The biggest laugh was when I stopped doing material and just talked and smiled a little
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7h1pIDBf9sg
3m02s These kind of shows are a good place to practice my bombing material
3m57s I shouldn’t do two dark jokes in a row
5m35s Keep holding the photo with my hand
Overall: The only time I got laughs was when I went off script and addressed the crowd or the situation in the room. My energy and enthusiasm was low and it showed in the lack of laughs. I need to find the line between deadpanning but still being excited to be there.
An open mic with five or six other comics, doing multiple short sets
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pMTy7KntZTk
0m17s Change “it’s not true” to “that’s not fully accurate”
0m27s Cut the insurance and dent line
1m18s Get rid of the three girl examples
3m27s Kill this joke
4m02s Slow down
5m05s Say “Costco” after “people are suffering”
Overall: I had about as much fun as one can have at an open mic, and even watching this I can see where some material needs to be tightened.
The Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qUdMhTnjvs4
0m54s Add “gets” after “Benflix”
1m20s Yell out “remix”
1m30s Point at someone when I say “you know it”
1m44s Reword to “my rap album drops next month”
2m04s End the sentence with “reviews for sexual partners”
3m14s I forgot to do the second part of the joke with girls being like restaurants
4m06s Have more emphasis on “existence”
Overall: Working out my half polished material, it’s passable but could still use a little tweaking.
A midnight show, that didn’t actually start till 12:30 and I’m the last one up
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=osTw_w9ql6c
1m22s No need to say “cancel relationship” twice
2m22s Don’t back down from the “eye fucking” so quickly
3m45s I need to think of another Russian weapon that’s better known
4m40s When “being on the plane” misses, I know to get out of the mom jokes
5m50s Explain the iphone app better
6m59s The dark joke missing makes getting followed home even funnier
7m48s Yell out “remix” louder
Overall: I had steady laughs except for the Yale joke which missed. At two am, keeping everyone focused is a feat in itself. This was also the first time I did the netflix joke with a live audience, and it went over fairly well.
