Category: Comedy

Headlining a bar show in Staten Island for 12-15 people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6ra15EqIc1k

2m20s Kill the monocle joke

4m23s Good reaction to the interruption, and good job continuing the joke, although I could’ve gone into my “hitting on the audience” material…

4m37s That echo is killing me

5m40s It’s not the strongest punch line, kill it, or deliver it very differently

8m29s Nice improvised one liner

9m29s More emphasis on “know it isn’t”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qm3cMkE55ZI

5m43s That one liner didn’t work at all, but I still enjoyed it

6m44s I can move my hand like rubbing my stomach to make myself look fatter while delivering this

8m18s This line can sound more conversational

8m50s After “if anyone needs a fake diagnosis” I should look at a female audience member and say, “We should play doctor”

9m42s Change “Planned Parenthood” to “abortion clinic” to make it more general

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pHgcUzOkCxI

3m24s Hit the punch line of “can’t play tennis drunk” harder

4m41s Nice long pause before this line and great delivery

6m09s Instead of “when” say “while”

6m45s They may have pointed at each other, but I misinterpreted to make it funnier

7m27s Not sure I need this joke, it didn’t help that it got interrupted on the setup

8m43s Funny that I didn’t acknowledge the mess up at all

Part 4

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CFmw_NMME9E

1m01s It should be “pervert” not “peed”

1m34s That’s a great line and a really good way of getting out of stuff when I cross the line

1m55s The guy had a Phillies shirt on

3m02s This was a charity show

3m30s First time I checked my set list, that’s 32 minutes without looking at notes, I’m happy

4m08s I need to develop the organic baby joke, it always gets a good response

5m28s Banter with the audience while looking at my list

Overall: I did 35 minutes and went 32 minutes without looking at my notes. Some jokes got bigger laughs than others, but this set was about being able to do thirty minutes in a row, remembering everything (I was only scheduled to do 30 minutes so I checked notes after 32 minutes, that’s a good lesson, prepare ten extra minutes of jokes) and having nobody walk out during my set (which is really easy when it’s at a bar show).

Saturday afternoon mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gaQCFZ7xFUM

0m16s The MC was doing an impression of “bad MCing” so I wanted to add that in, that failed

0m44s Don’t say subtle twice

1m04s Keep the handshaking going for all three characters without stopping

1m15s Put in the word “future” before children

1m37s No need for “dollar” in there

2m36s No need for the word “can” just “If you convince…”

2m48s Instead of “means” I should say “takes”

3m31s Get rid of the organic brownie part

4m39s I screwed up the start of it by actually saying his name

5m01s I didn’t explain the technique well enough before doing it

Overall: I need to say newer jokes out loud at least three times before doing them at mics, or else too many words get flubbed.

Opening the Friday night show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gSdl9uBjfTI

0m36s Not sure if the whispering works

2m04s Change “family” to “mom”

2m23s I’m a little too bent over

2m58s Weird that they didn’t laugh at “I remember being on the plane”

3m38s I messed up the line because I was already thinking about the next joke

5m05s Do a more husky voice for the man

5m30s I flubbed the line, it should be “but no situation ever warrants someone saying…”

7m15s Pause after “eye fucking”

Overall: Very mediocre. I was trying some new jokes and cut the length of existing jokes, so I was thinking about that more than being in the moment. I need to practice more before doing a new order in a short set, so that I don’t think about it during.

MCing a bar show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OROJIxa4BJA

0m31s When a room is really weird looking and you’re up first, you gotta acknowledge it

4m37s This joke is really hit or miss

5m25s I need to change from a female voice to a male voice for part of this joke

5m37s They were Asian

7m27s I forgot to mention he gets paranoid, and that’s an important part of the premise

8m44s Say “them” not “em

Part 2: Doing a little time between comics

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SKtJK3FjK7M

2m10s I should give this explanation at the start of the show

2m35s And I stopped doing material after this

Overall: My hosting up front was better than the material in between comics. I could’ve done my crowd work and actually talking to the audience, but then again, there were about 4 real audience members here…

Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YUagRxpy_VI

0m15s I could have just left it at socks

1m26s I need to add in “I’m making an exception for you”

2m58s I need to say “he’ll be like” before going into it

3m18s Don’t move my head, only my eyes for this character

Overall: I worked out some stuff. I need to mix in dark jokes with normal jokes, or it gets too predictable.