Performance Critique: May 6b

The Music and Comedy Late Night Mic Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LjUfsJzYUUA

0m16s That’s a great way to be likeable right away

0m33s It was funny when I said it in conversation, but it didn’t work on stage

2m50s This is working really well

3m23s Get rid of the “had to get a drink of water”

4m09s That didn’t deserve an applause break, but I’ll take it

5m09s Get rid of the mail/queue part

5m38s I did the “remix” thing enough times until it got funny

7m28s Get rid of the restaurant like girls comparison

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1SZbZfAyyq8

0m43s Change to “hire a hit man”

3m57s If the tap dancing gets a big laugh, I need a different line than “I’m in the market for a new mom”

4m46s Put more emotion behind “we didn’t even own a chess set”

7m03s I need to figure out a way to do this joke without seeming mean

7m53s The gym joke is much weaker than the rest of my mom material

8m28s This didn’t work cause I had already been a little mean on my last joke

Overall: Really solid set, I just need to be careful about not losing the audience by going too mean without justification.

My Writing Process

Here’s my current comedy writing process, hopefully this is helpful to someone.

The Daily:

Every morning, when I wake up and before I have breakfast, I write three pages of stream of consciousness by hand. My goal is to just write for fifteen minutes without stopping my pen. Anything goes in this and I really try not to judge it. Most of the stuff I write isn’t even an attempt at a joke, but occasional funny ideas pop into there, and the more important thing it does is get the writing momentum going for the day.writing-center

Whenever I notice something, think of something or something happens to me that I find funny, I write it down. Usually I type it into the notes feature on my phone, but sometimes if I have a notepad with me, I’ll write it on that. I usually note between 1 and 5 funny things each day.

The Weekly:

I’ll email my newest notes myself once a week and then go through each idea. If an idea still seems funny to me, I go through it that one idea a few times and rewrite it as a stand up bit. If I like the joke, I’ll move it into my joke file, and put it under the “new jokes” header. If I don’t like the new joke or if an original note is completely uninspiring, I cut and paste them into a file of “New Jokes that are still forming” (aka the junkyard). If an idea seems better as a sketch, I put it in a file called “Sketch Ideas” and before my weekly sketch group meeting, I go through that file to write a sketch.

I have a weekly stand up writing group, and I work out my newest jokes there and discuss them. More than half of the jokes that I bring in there, I never even try at an open mic, cause I can see they don’t work. We’ll discuss a joke at the writing group, I’ll take notes and I’ll either rewrite it or put it into the “still forming” pile.

If the joke passes the writers group, I’ll try it at an open mic (after I’ve said it aloud to myself five or ten times to more or less memorize it). I analyze how the joke sounds and feels the first time on stage, and if I still like it, I’ll keep doing it at mics and random bar shows. If the joke keeps working, it starts to go into my “better shows” set. Otherwise, it eventually ends up in the “still forming” pile.

I try to go through my existing jokes once a week and see if I have any updates to them, because I usually make a change in a live set before I make it in my file.

And whenever I work on a new joke or a complete rewrite of an existing joke, I create a new word document where I only have that joke there, so I don’t get distracted by looking at other jokes.

Once a week, I review my videos, and write the performance critiques. (I count this as part of my stand up writing.) While I watch the videos, I’ll have my joke file open and edit it down on the spot.

The Actual Writing

I talk into my mic as I write and when I practice the jokes, I’ll do them without looking at the word file. Sometimes I’ll come up with additional punch lines when I’m practicing memorizing the new material. Talking into the mic helps this “writing on your feet” process more than just talking aloud.

Accessing Jokes

I keep a copy of my latest version of my jokes on Google Docs so then I can access my entire joke file on my phone wherever I am.

How do you do your stand up writing? I’m always looking for new ideas on how to be more productive…

Performance Critique: May 6a

An open mic with six comedians

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JDO-rGja1wc

0m35s No need for “murderous rage” I can just say “drive me crazy”

2m12s I can get rid of the “2 seconds, 3 seconds” part

2m53s The numbers should be with two digits, not three digits, it’s less syllables

5m29s Get rid of the restaurant part

5m41s This is the second round of open mic

8m09s Change “community service” to “public service”

Overall: I powered through an open mic and although the other comics aren’t really laughing, I can still see what parts of jokes can be cut

Performance Critique: May 4

My bar show, about six people listening

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5SGFCijXXuE

1m59s I could’ve addressed them sooner

6m12s Ask them about their photos since they volunteered “you wanna see ours”

7m37s The first two times I say “this is a photo of the sand” should be without emphasis on a specific word

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bqZCX36R5CA

1m32s Kill this part of the joke

1m41s Add “a vacation from gainful employment”

Overall: I powered through my material in a loud room, got some laughs and was able to engage most of the audience into listening to at least part of my act. Aka, this could’ve been worse.

Performance Critique: May 3

A Monday bar show, with sparse audience

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p_N–qXavUk

1m53s They’re not fully listening by this point, I should talk to them a little bit

7m27s If I’m gonna ask about it, then I need to make a Catholic joke right after that

8m34s More emphasis on “without”

9m22s No need to explain the Wikipedia part, especially after a laugh

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XtMGN6WRjTs

0m28s Say “and here’s a picture of me taking a picture of…”

1m36s Pick which word to emphasize more consistently

2m00s Don’t do the fast stuff in the middle of the joke, only do it at the end

2m38s End this stronger

3m18s I should’ve noticed the crowd liked the dirtier jokes earlier in the set

4m01s Go back to “this week” instead of “since Tuesday”

Overall: I did some old stuff and some new stuff, it wasn’t great, but it wasn’t terrible either, especially given the crowd size. The sand joke needs some work.

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