Category: Comedy

Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5UyTdLUO1YU

0m34s Shorten to “I’m not being racist, I assumed that…”

2m20s It should be “apple pie” not “american pie”

2m32s I forgot to ask about “what holiday’s do you celebrate?”

3m09s Change this whole premise to “my friend is a good person, but he always complains. He’s not gonna be any better in heaven.”

3m31s Explain “cause oysters make pearls”

3m44s I need to make this a more distinct character

3m52s It should be a “sold out” concert

4m42s Pause before “to be” not after

5m16s Rephrase to “let’s reach towards the sun gods”

6m04s Do this in a girl voice

6m27s Change it from “knife” to “switchblade”

Overall: Surprisingly all of these jokes have potential. (Usually my newer or rewritten material is like a 20% hit rate.) But these jokes still need tightening and better delivery.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6q4R2xuQSS4

3m59s This punch line is closer to where it should be, but it’s not fully right yet

5m45s I should try doing this as a self realization, “I just realized it’s cheaper for a back alley bj than for an impression of my mom” or something like that

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OCEiDH27r0c

2m27s I just rewrote this punch line a few days ago, nice to see it working right away

4m19s Hit “I start to believe them” harder

4m28s The checks just got dropped mid-joke

5m44s A save line here could’ve helped

6m21s Add in “he’s like, don’t blame me, I only interrupted you” or something like that

Overall: Great 17 minute set and I was even able to keep most of the audience’s attention during the start of check dropping.

Doing the check spot on the 10pm show twenty seconds after an audience member vomited in the front row

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QkQ1h7dGrR0

1m57s Say “he just quit his job” more confidently, like it’s an actual punch line

5m50s I found out afterwards that part of the audience worked for Fox News, which makes this funnier to me

Overall: The situation was so ridiculous that it was fun. I did a good job calling out the situation and eventually working in a few jokes.

Going up on the 8pm show after someone bailed on their set two minutes in and made the room awkward.

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4GYWiQ0oIko

1m17s Hold the “what the hell look” for an extra half second

1m52s The iPhone joke is no longer one of my stronger jokes

4m45s Scrunch my face first, then crouch down

4m56s Let them complain for longer before going into my rant

5m10s It doesn’t make sense to do both the “that’s how I wrote the joke” and to ask them for money

5m38s Shouldn’t have gone into another mom joke when the response to the first two was only so so

6m33s Don’t bring my arm up until the word “passion”

7m34s Lean back a bit while saying “no, no, no”

9m04s It should be “MY O’Reily Factor appearance” not “THE”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M41LUuI9ddQ

0m13s It should be “SWEAT pants” not “pants”

0m27s The above mistake is why this punchline completely missed

2m19s The better response would’ve been, “you’re my manager, I pay you to know if she’s here”

2m53s This is about when I should’ve grabbed the mic stand

Overall: I brought the room back to normal after it got really awkward but the set itself was average to mediocre.

Going last at my Astoria show for an audience of 8

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=04FwjJERZ_w

0m36s The wireless mic kept fading in and out

0m59s Pause after “How”

3m43s Say all these diseases much slower, pausing after each syllable, to prove my point

5m03s Tilt my head to the side and widen my eyes more

5m21s I can say “I don’t have a spreadsheet or something” as a callback to my “cool in a nerdy way” joke (that I didn’t do tonight)

6m39s Act more surprised about the last photo

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=putibvIr4GQ

1m01s I need a better punchline but the idea is there

1m57s Do that in the same voice as the previous impression

Overall: Considering I was sick and went up almost 2 hours into the show, it went okay. The callback ending worked well.