Hosting a writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NUZw1LC9A1c
1m40s I’m trying to say all the psychotic things in my normal voice
1m51s And it doesn’t flow right
2m33s This delivery is a one time experiment that doesn’t work
3m43s Change “knew” to “understood”
3m56s Say “this is me positive” without “being” and with the same tonality as my mom
Overall: Eh. I’m playing with different vocal tonalities for the crazy character, and my regular voice isn’t the right tonality.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=85Zezux02aI
1m18s I went a little too aggressive for no reason
3m33s Address the guy getting offended at coke heads more, could’ve gotten extra laughs
5m14s Don’t say “I know” unless someone gasps or reacts audibly
5m42s The puppies lines is funnier without a save line before it
7m14s She said “for you” that’s awesome
7m22s Keep milking it and talk to her more
Overall: Average to mediocre. I need to learn to embrace crowd interactions instead of get annoyed by them.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_LBfXSbYW_4
0m11s Acknowledge the audience before starting, or stare at them until all the talking stops
0m45s Don’t stutter on store
2m08s Reword to “I probably shouldn’t have pointed at”
2m20s I’m not sure what he said, but I should’ve addressed it more
4m18s Go into the interruption more, even if it got a laugh
6m09s I should hit that line harder
8m27s Address it more and don’t talk over it
Overall: Mediocre set with a couple of big laughs in the middle. I should do a better job of addressing the talking.
An open mic for five or six comics
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JThnzMkDxoU
3m26s Change strangulation to piano
4m40s Change this punch line
5m29s Change twelve to dozens
Overall: Weak even for a mic. The less people watching, the more I have to start my set by talking to people instead of going into jokes.
Late night music and comedy
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2JqHheBZS70
0m29s The guy before me was doing Tupac covers, it was funny
2m54s Guy said “that’s a lot of people”
8m57s Don’t do all the bombing material in a row, even if it’s at a mic
9m24s Try adding “I’ll shimmy my way into your dreams”
10m04s This needs to be considered an A joke
Overall: Really good set, newer material and rewrites went over well.
