Tag: Critiques

A feedback mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O6L_kVjS4Oo

5m54s This joke could use a few tags

Overall: Second half was stronger than the first half

Going last at a comedy and music mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ikMjBt9fWZA

1m01s Add in “there’s an open sex slave mic after this show ends”

2m41s Over two and a half minutes before doing material, might be a bit long

5m29s Answer with “intuition”

8m38s Don’t over explain it

Overall: I did a good job of just talking to the audience at the start for a few minutes and got consistent low laughs afterwards.

A bar show for six or eight people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r5497EH2Z7k

0m33s Milk it harder, “I would’ve left, hidden and had the camera ready for when he kicks off the chair”

3m27s If there’s that long of a lull, go into crowd work then a bit

3m53s Great improvised line

4m05s The mom thing isn’t clear because I talked over laughs

7m59s Change “knew” to “understood”

8m57s It should be “he’s so cutting edge” not “that’s so cutting edge”

Overall: Decent considering the small turn out. Some of the crowd interaction parts were good.

The 10pm show with five people or so

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ewF2bq5dR4U

0m11s Someone else got that intro

0m33s Add “and stripping is less demeaning”

1m22s If I’m gonna acknowledge that I’m going into real jokes, make a joke about it “and now structured things that I’m gonna try to make seem unstructured and natural”

3m30s Good job acknowledging it, even if it didn’t get a laugh

5m06s Good job milking crowd interactions

6m18s Pause after “hundreds of dollars a month to tell jokes”

7m12s That’s the right punch line, I might be able to tag it though

Overall: Good job talking to the crowd for most of the set and not just doing jokes

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vrZGxYOwz_Y

2m38s Cut or reword

3m23s Try “like I’ve wrapped piano wire…”

5m34s Reword to “I can prove it with letters from dozens of shrinks”

Overall: Decent for a mic.