Tag: Critiques

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5Q8ekcnEQQo

0m35s Do a bigger hand motion and for a little longer

1m07s Change “whatever” to “it’s okay” to mirror the first part of the joke

2m39s Explain the analogy before doing the act out

4m00s Point as I say the line

5m51s Nice honest moment

5m54s And then an improvised tag

6m45s Don’t point for that long

7m06s That’s a good add on

8m18s Say “Jesus can’t help you, he’s too busy with ripsaws”

Overall: Good but not great, a bunch of tags need work.

A late night comedy and music mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W81ylJM4OXk

2m49s Maybe don’t do the Jesus joke first as the character

5m42s Good job addressing the heckle while keeping the set moving forward

Overall: Second half of the set was better than the first half.

A bar show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9eOq-d7IX54

3m05s Connect this more explicitly with the disappointing parents idea

4m48s Deliver it like I’m more frustrated

6m55s First say “I’m not sure why I pointed at you”

7m43s Figure out a smoother way to explain and transition this part

Overall: Good set but I need a smoother transition towards the end.

A writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IsdrpI_rRFg

1m52s Funny response while in act out character

2m10s Change from pointing motion to something else

2m42s Transition is very jarring, figure out a different way to introduce it

5m40s Rephrase to “what’s wrong? Is my lipstick smeared?” and then wipe my mouth

5m56s The “twelve minutes” should be at the start of the sentence

Overall: First joke went well the rest was mediocre.

Doing a prom show at 2am

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rgO1p0rkEN4

0m23s Should’ve said “if you have to say you’re cool, you’re not cool”

1m41s Say at as a statement, not a question

1m58s I need a setup before doing the act out

2m14s Say “community college” instead of “Yale”

3m17s Point at the kid for this line

4m37s Don’t hold the mic with two hands like this, it’s weak body language

6m16s Good improvised line

10m48s At least I ended on an ok laugh

Overall: I sucked. I don’t seem as confident as usual and my energy level is too low for teens at 2am.