Tag: Critiques

Doing a 9:30 show, with more audience than usual

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cf6XOTPF-8w

0m48s Go bigger with the pointing motion

1m21s Go bigger with the pointing motion

1m34s Don’t use the words “today at work”

2m37s Draw out “I’m kidding” a little longer/softer

4m22s Come across my body on the pointing

6m08s This is a new twist to an old joke, gotta find the best wording for it

6m48s Add “cause you’re all uptight”

7m08s Put more emphasis on “AND”

7m53s Don’t stop on the laughs

8m33s Nice end on the joke

Overall: Great set. I messed around with the audience and would lose them a little but then bring them right back stronger. And I also got 3 or 4 big laughs from a two day old bit, so there’s lots of potential there.

Opening the 8pm show. Video starts 2 minutes into the set because I didn’t set it up in time

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4jt9Kvtp2hg

1m47s Weird delivery in “I was in the baggage check”

3m18s Good improvising

4m38s Good interaction

5m27s Good save to a weird ending of a joke

6m31s Move the mic away faster so they know to ask “why”

9m00s Add a “sir” at the end of it to make it less harsh

Overall: The jokes were hit or miss by the crowd interactions were very solid.

Hosting the writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=owcyXs1VfrI

1m29s Try “that one’s not for everyone, it’s only for the girls that I’ll date”

Overall: Good for opening a mic. I did two older bits to setup two new bits.

The 10pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S3c_8_dVlRs

3m21s Pause between the first two lines

5m50s Nice natural reaction

5m58s And great improvised response

6m56s Eyes should be moving around more wildly and the whole time

Overall: Great set with 3 applause breaks. Two new bits worked pretty well too.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LifZYJRbA0Q

3m30s React a little more to their slight “aww”

4m28s Turn to the side for “no, not a women’s prison” so it feels more like an aside

5m35s Say “why Blade is in prison” instead of “he”

6m04s Could’ve tagged it with “I hope you’re not here with your “girlfriend””

6m42s Shift delivery on the second half of the sentence, that might get an extra laugh

Overall: Solid set.