MCing a show for 10-12 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FhU9LllstwY
0m20s Instead of “tell you” say “share”
2m28s Decent crowd work
Overall: This is the shortest up front MC set ever, I got a few ok laughs and ended on a laugh. I did more time later but didn’t get to film it.
At a writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MrmDfnOGkTo
0m51s Cut the fractions line
4m54s The sad delivery is better than the aggressive delivery of the DVD line
6m20s Add a “that’s ridiculous right? that’s like saying…” to make it more emotional and conversational
8m06s Find a better way to get to that ending
Overall: About as good as an open mic can go. Although the biggest laughs were from interacting with disruptive crowd members.
A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=d8Rv_lCjVNM
0m49s Slow down on “take your job” pausing between each word
3m28s Try “I realize it sounds harsh, but I’ll justify it.”
7m01s Find a better wording for all this
7m56s The Shaq line doesn’t make sense
9m18s Reword to “chugs a liter of wine a night, straight out of the bottle”
Overall: Weak for a music mic, but one or two new bits towards the start did ok.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S-ivnqydzcQ
0m55s If keeping the line, change it to, “and I do fractions”
2m58s Change “to someone” to “to your girlfriend”
3m22s Deliver the line more desperately
4m14s Say “sock puppets” instead of “hand puppets”
4m26s In the puppet voice, add “don’t worry, he’s gonna buy your merchandise”
6m40s The wording is closer, but still not right
Overall: Average mic response.
Going last on the 9:30 show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=akrI4XybiPw
4m12s Make the DVD buying more urgent
5m43s Get an actual joke there
8m22s Figure out a way to make that line work
10m48s Change the merchandise pitch
11m04s Reword to “a liter of wine right out of the bottle”
Overall: Great set of 80% new material. Also great first minute just improvising.
