Tag: Critiques

A 9:30 show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C8Y2n7ATROQ

0m47s No need for that line

4m11s Drop my head quicker after that line

4m52s At least the new line hit decently well

6m28s From the tape, it doesn’t seem like anyone actually hates me at this set yet, no need to keep putting that thought in their head

8m20s Might be a decent line, “it’s okay to hate me AND laugh”

Overall: Mediocre and scatter brained. I think I told the audience they hated me on five or six different occasions, no need to mention that even if it’s true. On the bright side, two new punch lines seems to be working in a newer joke.

A music and comedy mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y3zJ_txmsN8

1m55s Lean forward while doing the pointing motion for more emphasis

3m59s Should’ve gone for a save line here. I paused thinking about it, but then just went to the next bit.

4m55s Pause for half a beat after “always greener”

6m07s Sound more confused and surprised that someone would object to the floor

6m44s Instead of “someone might buy” say “this guys gonna buy”

9m01s Say “expensive” instead of “difficult”

Overall: Pretty terrible set, even for a mic.

Going last 2.5+ hours into the show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ehwPO1bxdE0

4m14s Great delivery on this line

Overall: Great set and my new joke ended the set fairly strong.

A second 10pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=po79kXaJqzo

2m10s Nice improvising

5m45s Nice for a new joke to work

8m13s Take a slight pause after “screw the steady supply of sex”

10m21s Lean forward more authoritatively on this line

Overall: Great set. Two new bits worked and I had a lot of fun with crowd interactions.

A 10pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q7fNemqm_jI

3m35s No need for “sir” at the end of the sentence

4m18s Cut the word “outstanding”

5m18s Do the radar thing on myself if I’m gonna bother to set it up

Overall: Decent set, the new alimony joke worked but didn’t hit as hard as the other stuff