Tag: Critiques

Closing out the 10pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ognsGy2d1Nc

1m27s Good job responding

1m53s And then milking the interruption for another 20 seconds, until I can bring it back into the original joke

2m43s Add “he’s like” before “you’re making good points”

4m11s Nice improvised addition

4m41s There was loud yelling in the hallway, that turned into something physical

6m08s Nothing like a 90 second hallway distraction to keep things interesting

6m35s Good job refocusing them

9m14s Nice improvised callback

10m34 Say “to your” not “to a”

10m52s Milk the sadness for a second longer before bringing my head back up

Overall: Great set especially considering the minor melee/dispute in the hallway that happened in the middle. I improvised and rolled with it, wasn’t fazed and then brought the crowd back to focus on my set.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zRPoakZLNfs

2m33s It should be “hurricane” not rain

4m18s Didn’t need that line, as it got a decent laugh

7m50s The Kazaam joke needs smoother delivery throughout, it’s still a little choppy

Overall: Good but not great.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WONeL49NQTQ

1m09s Hit “fucking immigrants” harder, maybe even angry

2m35s Put more emphasis on “AND”

4m29s Maybe add “off tune” before “singing”

Overall: Great for an open mic

MCing a bar show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ajyBEHMlSnI

1m48s I could also go with “Ill, Michigan? How far away from Detroit is that?”

2m32s If I had remembered I said Jersey, and called back to it, it would’ve hit well

6m10s Add “he’s probably texting his coke dealer”

7m32s Nice line

7m53s Even better would be to say “between the four of you, you have one job and are from Minnesota”

9m15s Doing time between comics

12m13s Tighten to “he goes thru your stuff but doesn’t take anything because…”

13m19s Make the friend’s voice more different from my own

13m49s Decent improvised line

Overall: Good job with the upfront time mixing in the crowd work with material. The in between comics stuff could’ve gone better though.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M5JvbIJTiv0

0m50s Cut this line or reword it

3m35s Cut or reword this line

Overall: Decent response for this specific (usually extra tough) mic