Tag: Critiques

Another mic, with terrible lighting

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tv9jJfjGiPg

2m49s More emphasis on “I’m”

6m44s Good improvising, could’ve reacted slightly sooner

Overall: Average mic response

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i0dAfU7YFs0

1m35s It should be “buddy” not “friend” cause that’s what I said earlier

2m48s Reword to “but he doesn’t take anything cause he realizes those Kazaam DVDs…”

3m16s Make the whole sentence past tense

3m29s Decent improvised tag

4m41s Change the hand motion to something else

4m55s Change “brag” to “show off”

Overall: Good for a mic. The new marriage bit went over decently well.

The 8pm show for 15 people or so

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mArRG9P-_BI

2m04s Go into questioning her wohoo more, “do you like to be intimidated by parental figures, or what?”

4m04s Say the line a little softer

7m01s More emphasis on “and”

Overall: Good consistent set, nothing amazing though.

Hosting the writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pcY-lVr-ih8

1m08s Say “look it into the glove” not “watch it into the glove”

2m01s More emphasis on “and”

3m15s Change “the line for bread” to “bread line”

Overall: Decent for opening a mic. New anti-marriage bit at the end has potential.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lrSFP23vHQU

0m24s Combining the words and hand motion doesn’t work

1m20s Make it sound more like a statement

4m41s That’s the best the immigrant joke has done to date

8m15s Milk the head down for longer

9m17s Don’t bumble the delivery mid sentence, it’ll ruin the punch line

Overall: Good set, new stuff worked fairly well until I stumbled on a line towards the end